Another Soul by Sword of Justice

[Grain]

満ちた月の心　今宵は染まる
晴天のその先に　Another world
Michita tsuki no kokoro koyoi wa somaru
Seiten no sono saki ni Another world

Tonight the soul of the full moon will be stained
After the weather clears, in another world.

Did I translate this stanza okay? I had a bit of trouble figuring out how to say "seiten no sono saki ni" in English.

[Hikarin]

What I really want to know, is what is causing it to "染まる"? Do the lyrics say?

As for the second line.... it really makes things awkward when lyrics decide to use English within them, I find. It sounds fine in Japanese, but to then translate that fully into English.... it just sounds funny, if you're trying to provide the essence of the line's meaning. The dilemma is whether to keep that part as is, or to change it slightly.
I don't know how I would word that line exactly, but I think that I would perhaps translate "晴天" to something more like "clear skies" given that they are already talking about other things in the heavens like the moon and another world. And perhaps I would change "another world" to "in that other world".

[Grain]

Unfortunately, the lyrics don't say what is staining the moon. Here is the whole song with my translation bolded.

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彼方鈍色の空を　悲愴の風が切り裂く Kanata nibiiro no sora wo hisou no kaze ga kirisaku
凍る漆黒の海に　紫紺（レンゲ）の魂沈む Kooru shikkoku no umi ni renge no tamashii shizumu

Sorrowful winds tear apart the distant, dark grey sky.
The soul of the lotus sinks into the frozen, jet black sea.

棚引く煙霞（けむり）の中　残酷な願い求めて Tanabiku kemuri no naka zankoku na negai motomete
言葉は届かないまま　消えゆくは運命（さだめ）Kotoba wa todokanai mama kieyuku wa sadame

Searching for a cruel wish amidst the lingering smoke,
The words remain unheard. Their fate is to disappear.

Pray for purification of their soul
Call me the liar over again

Praying for the purification of their souls,
They call me a liar over and over again.

…冷たい雨が降り注ぐ Tsumetai ame ga furisosogu

Cold rain pours down.

滾る獣の咆吼　挫折が導く Tagiru kemono no houhou zasetsu ga michibiku
魂魄（たましい）を解き放て　Another soul Tamashii wo tokihanete Another soul

A furious beast’s failings usher its howls.
Set its soul free, another soul.

眠る赤色の川を　火葬を受け水が昇る Nemuru sekishoku no kawa wo kasou wo uke mizu ga noboru
濁る静寂の果てに　哀愁の魂叫ぶ Nigoru seijaku no hate ni aishuu no tamashii sakebu

Water sweeps away the dead’s ashes and flows up a slumbering river of red.
The mournful souls wail at the end of the murky stillness.

一線の光が劈く　未来（あす）への扉を開けと Issen no hikari ga tsunzaku asu e no tobira wo hirake to
軋む地に脅えたまま　迸る命 Kishimu chi ni obieta mama hotobashiru inochi

A thread of light pierces the door of tomorrow. Open it, and
The creaking ground remains afraid, surging with life.

I tried to be perfect just like you
but I have come to "THE END"

I tried to be perfect just like you,
but I have come to "the end."

…寂しい棘が突き刺さる Sabishii toge ga tsukisasaru

A lonely thorn sticks out.

満ちた月の心　今宵は染まる Michita tsuki no kokoro koyoi wa somaru
晴天のその先に　Another world Seiten no sono saki ni Another world

Tonight the soul of the full moon will be stained
After the weather clears, in another world.

*Repeat some stuff

It never returns to …

It never returns to...

*Repeat some stuff

Another Soul

Another Soul.

[bambooXZX]

To me, the verse reads like the coloration of the moon signals a change, and "Another World" lies after/beyond the clear skies.

Also:

一線の光が劈く　未来（あす）への扉を開けと Issen no hikari ga tsunzaku asu e no tobira wo hirake to
軋む地に脅えたまま　迸る命 Kishimu chi ni obieta mama hotobashiru inochi
A thread of light pierces the door of tomorrow. Open it, and
The creaking ground remains afraid, surging with life.

I think I'd parse 未来（あす）への扉を開けと as a quote statement, in this context being a figurative command from the events that are unfolding (linked to either 劈く or 軋む), and the surging life is afraid of the creaking ground.

[Grain]

To me, the verse reads like the coloration of the moon signals a change, and "Another World" lies after/beyond the clear skies.

Also:

一線の光が劈く　未来（あす）への扉を開けと Issen no hikari ga tsunzaku asu e no tobira wo hirake to
軋む地に脅えたまま　迸る命 Kishimu chi ni obieta mama hotobashiru inochi
A thread of light pierces the door of tomorrow. Open it, and
The creaking ground remains afraid, surging with life.

I think I'd parse 未来（あす）への扉を開けと as a quote statement, in this context being a figurative command from the events that are unfolding (linked to either 劈く or 軋む), and the surging life is afraid of the creaking ground.

Somehow my mind glossed over the に particle every single time I read this song. I guess that's what proofreaders are for. Thanks.