Detective Conan - Overwrite

[Rei]

Link: http://www.animelyrics.com/anime/conan/overwrite.htm

Just a few corrections for the translation.

1. The flowers are blooming, but on that day, I wasn't able to see them scattered.
This instant of time was
the beginning of the end.

花は咲く でもあの日散った花は見れない
この一瞬の時間は
はじまりで終わり

Rather than 'beginning of the end', which would be 「はじまりの終わり」, wouldn't it be 'This instant of time / ended when it began' or something?


2. Blue sky, setting sun, the repetition of changing seasons.
Incidentally, I looked up and the shape of the clouds were flowing in the same way.

青い空 沈む太陽 繰り返し巡る季節
ふと見上げると 同じ形の雲は流れてなかった

I believe 「同じ形」 is referring to the clouds here, and not the flow direction. Also wouldn't 流れてなかった be 'not flowing' instead of 'flowing'.


3. It's etched into my heart! This moment
continues to keep changing. That image of you
reflects in my eyes! And I didn't fail
to notice your smile either.
Because of that, we'll meet again.

心に刻むよ この瞬間を
変わり続ける 君のその姿を
瞳に映すよ 君の笑顔も
見逃さないように
だから また逢いましょう


「～ように」 is more of 'So that~', isn't it? Also 逢いましょう sounds like more of a 'Let's meet again' instead of a more decisive 'We will meet again' which is more like 「逢います」. (Correct me if I'm wrong)


4. Our everydays are progressively overwriting.
And even if we stand still, it'll keep improving anyway.

僕らの毎日は上書きの連続で
立ち止まっていても 更新されてゆく


These two sentences seem linked to me by the 「で」. Having both 'even if' and 'anyway' seems kinda redundant, but that might just be me.


5. Those cheerful, nostalgic days that had passed,
the first time I fell in love and my fleeting youth,
hitting obstacles, and my tears flowing,
like I'd never forget.
Because of that,
Baby Baby
we'll meet again.

はしゃぎ回ってた 幼き日々も
初めて恋した 淡い青春も
壁にぶつかって 流す涙も
忘れないように
だから
Baby Baby
また逢いましょう

Same as 3.


6. On those sparkling days, laughing together with you and
taking each other's hands, the connection of our vow too,
our future's connected! Together in the light,
I want to reach it.
Because of that,
Baby Baby
we'll meet again.

君と笑い合った 輝く日々も
手を取り合った 誓いの絆も
未来に繋ぐよ 光とともに
届けたいから
だから
Baby Baby
また逢いましょう

Missing the 'kara' in the translation.


7. Overwrite
Overwrite
Overwrite

Not consistent- stated as 'Overwrite' here but 'Overwriting' in the title.

[EJTranslations]

@yui miyamoto ?

[yui miyamoto]

Hello Rei-san and Bluepenguin-san,



Just a few corrections for the translation.

1. Rather than 'beginning of the end', which would be 「はじまりの終わり」, wouldn't it be 'This instant of time / ended when it began' or something?

‘De’ can be used as ‘with’ so that is why I used ‘beginning of the end’.


2. The reason I phrased it that way IS because the clouds were flowing the same way as the changing seasons.
‘Were flowing’ is used because of the comparison. There is always a change of past and present for Japanese and just chose to express it in this fashion.
Miageru refers to ‘looking up’ and so he is comparing the sky changing and that time.

A lot of Japanese consists of looking at the previous things and assume that the audience knows what the writer/singer is talking about, so that’s why I connected these two in this fashion.


3. Mashou does say ‘Let’s’ however, he said ‘Dakara aimashou’ as in ‘That’s why we’ll meet again’. I don’t think the singer was being indecisive, otherwise this song would seem like he regrets to go back to that time.

4. O I know that it sounds redundant, but I wanted to include the degree of ‘yuku’ which is flowing in that directions and the word更新 was more than fixing and such but to leave it as is didn’t seem sufficient.

5. ‘ように’I phrased it this way because he’s reminiscing that it had all gone so fast that he’d never forget but it was like he would. All the images flow so fast.


6. Missing the 'kara' in the translation.


Yes, I agree, it should say ‘Because I want to reach it.’

7. Overwrite
Overwrite
Overwrite

Not consistent- stated as 'Overwrite' here but 'Overwriting' in the title.

I understand that, but if it were overwriting, then there would be a –te imasu form there so I was trying to be consistent.



Thank you very much and I'll keep this in mind for the future.


Have a good Valentine's!


Sincerely,
Yui

[Rei]

@yui miyamoto Thanks for answering, and a Happy Valentine's to you, too!

Okay, I get the rest of it- but for number 2; isn't ～なかった a past negative form? Or am I just being ignorant? ^^;; I understand that you're trying to link the past and present times together, but that question remains.

[bambooXZX]

Hm, I can't say I'm convinced by the response to point 1 (はじまりで終わり). Even if we take で as 'with', I feel like "beginning of the end" means something entirely different in English.

[EJTranslations]

Thanks for answering, and a Happy Valentine's to you, too!

Okay, I get the rest of it- but for number 2; isn't ～なかった a past negative form? Or am I just being ignorant? ^^;; I understand that you're trying to link the past and present times together, but that question remains.

No, you're correct that it's negative.

Also, I don't really know how to explain this, but "XもYもZも忘れないように" reads to me very definitely as "so I won't forget X, Y, or Z", not "I felt like I'd never forget...".