Serenity

[OminousCloud]

The cast pebble,
penetrates and permeates the calm exterior.
The ripples which spread,
so hypnotising, carry the burden of anguish.
That, which is seen,
Although truly felt, lasts only a fleeting moment.
Without a trace,
equilibrium returns to the exterior.
Serene once more,
that which was felt is no longer seen; a clever facade.
Lying beneath,
the heart, formerly untouched, tainted eternally.

[SigmaSD]

Wow, that was a pretty phenomenal ending. This poem was like the calm after the storm.

[LadyPSerenity]

I really and truly enjoyed that poem. It had great meaning, and flowed wonderfully to a well defined beat. I think there was only one point where I tripped up on the words but other than that I could truly see it being a poem and not a mashing of words together claiming to be a poem when really it should be seen as no more than a mess of thoughts written in no pattern.

Excellent!

[OminousCloud]

I really and truly enjoyed that poem. It had great meaning, and flowed wonderfully to a well defined beat. I think there was only one point where I tripped up on the words but other than that I could truly see it being a poem and not a mashing of words together claiming to be a poem when really it should be seen as no more than a mess of thoughts written in no pattern.

Excellent!

I'm glad you enjoyed it. To be honest, I'm not entirely satisfied with the flow. The intention was to have a fixed number of syllables which repeat throughout; 4 for the first and 13 for the one to follow. I didn't really check it too closely, and some lines may be off.