This is the characters bios and the story introduction to the book I've been working on since I was about 11. I need honest critique >.<


CHARACTERS:


Karu[car-oo] Mitzerugi[mits-er-oo-gee]
Gender: Male
Age: 15
Height: 5ft-6in
Weight: 130 pounds
Eye color: Green
Hair color: Black
Qualities: Short tempered, arrogant at times, but also can be sweet.
Likes: Training
Dislikes: When Kaname is injured or upset.
Good or bad character: Good.

Kaname[ka-nah-may] Shikara[shi-car-uh]
Gender: Female
Age: 15
Height: 5ft-4in
Weight: 115 pounds
Eye color: Light blue with light purple around it
Hair color: White
Qualities: Wolf ears, wolf tail, wolf fangs. Charges into things sometimes. She is Kanome's twin.
Likes: Training and hiking.
Dislikes: When Karu is mad.
Good or bad character: Good. She is the reincarnation of the mighty spirit wolf, which is why she has wolf characteristics and white hair.

Kanome[ka-no-may] Shikara[shi-car-uh]
Gender: Female
Age: 15
Height: 5ft-4in
Weight: 115 pounds
Eye color: Light blue
Hair color: Black
Qualities: Playful at times, tolerant when it's not Sako, and shy. Her twin is Kaname.
Likes: To get on Kaname's nerves.
Dislikes: Sako at first.
Good or bad character: Good.

Shishe[shih-she]
Gender: Male
Age: 5
Height: Medium
Weight: 50 pounds
Eye color: Blue and green
Hair color: Black and white fur
Qualities: Very protective and mysterious. He is a demon wolf.
Likes: To adventure.
Dislikes: To be away from Kaname and Kanome for long periods of time.
Good or bad character: Good.

Hirata[here-uh-ta] Zimechi[zim-e-chi]
Gender: Female
Age: 14
Height: 5ft-2in
Weight: 105 pounds
Eye color: Dark green
Hair color: Brown
Qualities: "Forgetful" and a thief.
Likes: To steal things and pretend she didn't.
Dislikes: When found out.
Good or bad character: Good? Both?

Miyuki[my-u-key] Ochiwa[o-chi-wah]
Gender: Male
Age: 17
Height: 5ft-9in
Weight: 165 pounds
Eye color: Deep red
Hair color: Black with white markings
Qualities: Evil smirk when thinking of his next plan. Tricky. He is Sako's cousin.
Likes: To hurt and kill others. Torture.
Dislikes: People with good intentions.
Good or bad character: Bad. He is the demon that terrorizes lands.

Sako[saw-ko] Ushima[oo-she-mah]
Gender: Male
Age: 16
Height: 5ft-6in
Weight: 140 pounds
Eye color: Hazel
Hair color: Black
Qualities: Perverse...very much so toward Kanome. He is Miyuki's cousin.
Likes: Kanome.
Dislikes: Being turned down by Kanome.
Good or bad character: Bad at first.


INTRODUCTION:

In a land of constant feudal war and destruction, a child named Karu was born. He was very talented as well as gifted for his young age. He remained undefeated until the age of 10 where he finally met his match. He fought this well versed demon named Miyuki who was only two years older than him. Miyuki slaughtered Karu's mother and father and left Karu to suffer. From that moment on, Karu vowed to get Miyuki back for the horrors he's done to his land and to so many before his. His dearest friends, Kaname and Kanome's parents were killed by Miyuki as well. Kaname and Kanome were left with a little demon wolf cub by their parents as a present to treasure just before they died. Kaname and Kanome are twins, but Kaname has a different hair color and an extra color to her eyes because she is the reincarnation of the spirit wolf, the protector of the forest. They named their demon wolf cub Shishe. Now, five years later, here we are in the forest of Kanuga...