Pride

[Howling Star]

Another experiment let me know what you think if you read it please.. =)

Pride

To find a cooler place in my life
To develop a courage like no other
I lust for happiness like no other

So here I am on my knees like the undead
I beg from these swines
Who told me to endure

Words are easy to say
Yet harder to understand
Though the hardest is to do

And the pride I swallowed to say what follows
Took me to long
Now I realise it's my salvation to say these words

Please...
Would you lend me your hand
To take me out of this place

To find a cooler a place in my life
Would you end my endurement
Would you set me free

[Mugiwara-no-Basuke]

I know this is old but as nobody comment it I felt I should do so.
Like the poem, not very melodious in matters of rhymes or so but it seems like you wrote it with a lot of feeling, which is nice How do long do you write poetry btw?