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[Kirei Shijin]

I put a lot of thought, emotion, time and effort into this. Luckily I've never gone through something this devastating. However, I tried my best to see it through a girls eyes that has lost someone she has always loved even though he was always so closed off and never let her in. If you need me to explain anything to you, just let me know. It's more lengthy and complex than my usual poetry.

He was a translucent window.
She could see him,
But not right through,
She squinted her eyes to look outside,
But he always blocked her View.


He was an opaque window.
Walls surrounded him,
She pushed but he refused to move,
She would waste her eyes crying,
Her mind she continued to Lose.


He is now transparent.
She can see him-
Straight through.

Her lips tremble
As she tries to make words;

"Why did you have to die?"
"I wish for one last time I could say this to you";


"You were always so stubborn,
You never let me see,
The self you kept hidden,
But you still mean the world to me.

You should have let me be yours,
But your fear grew,
It ate you from the outside to your very core,
If only you knew,
How much I have and always will love you.

Now I look at your lifeless body,
With lifeless eyes to match,
My only wish is that I could turn back time,
Back to when there could have been a chance-
Of calling you mine.
Back to when you could have opened up,
Back to when you could have felt true love.

You will always be my beautiful window,
One I can look out of during the first spring rain,
Unfortunately pain will always remain with me,
I will never go away."



She holds him in her arms and sobs,
As she mumbles her last remaining thoughts...
"At last, you finally let me look into your eyes,
But, you're not even here with me, not even partially alive."

[SigmaSD]

Wow this poem certainly was very deep. I sense the strong bond and emotion from the narrator to the boy in the poem. It kind of has a sense of regret and disappointment. There was something left undone between the narrator and the boy and so their is a void in there. Even if she finally gets to understand him, she will never be able to be completely sure cause he is gone.

Nice poem. I thought it had great flow and word choice. It had a great steady rhythm. Nice job .

[*Tsuki*]

I agree with Sigma.

It really was great.
Probably your best in my opinion.
I think the concept behind it was great as well.
It makes me feel like I would cry, had this happened to be.

[Kirei Shijin]

Thanks you two. Your comments are always greatly appreciated. I'm also very glad that you got an understanding of the emotions behind it. I was afraid it would be too complex and lose it's meaning due to it's length.

[Kaname Shikara]

I agree with *Tsuki* and SigmaSD I think it is your best poem ^^ it was very deep and emotions exploded through it. It wasn't complex at all. Great job yet again Kirei

[*Tsuki*]

Thanks you two. Your comments are always greatly appreciated. I'm also very glad that you got an understanding of the emotions behind it. I was afraid it would be too complex and lose it's meaning due to it's length.

I actually think the length helped it to make more sense. ^^

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Bravo!! *Goes up on stage and gives a bouquet of roses to Kirei*
It was umm thavmasios!

[Kirei Shijin]

Thank you!

@Night: A little Greek eh? lol Efharisto (which means thank you in Greek.)

[Anime-Prince]

Very good.

I admire this poem a lot.

[ultra_maniac]

i just want to say thanks

[Kirei Shijin]

Thank you!!