always on my mind

[sogood01]

baby your always on my mind
looking out the window letting out a sigh,
all around i see all these signs
looking out seeing such a beautiful butterfly,

wouldn't know what to do if i was with out you
wouldn't know what to do if i ever lost you forever,
never have to worry like i do
i know we'll always be together,

looking out in the deep blue sky
you have a way of making me so warm inside,
never thinking of why
always wanna be by your side,

always there when i need you most
can't help thinking your always on my mind
day and night just wanna hold you close...
just wanna be by your side

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Wow okay you've improved tremendously! There are much lesser mistakes now and it sounds good like good poetry should.

"you have a why (Way) of making me so warm inside"
"looking out seeing such a butiful (Beautiful) butterfly,"
"looking out the window leting(letting) out a sigh,"

Those are the only faults in the poem. Everything else is fantastic. I'm glad you're consistently writing more poetry. The next one will be flawless.

[*Tsuki*]

Well, there are a couple more . . .

never have to worrie like i do

That would be worry.

alway there when i need you most

Always?

Other than that, and the ones pointed out in the previous post,
it really was great. ^^
You keep improving, and it's quite remarkable.
Continue writing!

[sogood01]

thank you ^_^ i will.

[ultra_maniac]

tremendous improvement and good style for writing keep up the good work

[Kaname Shikara]

I agree you have improved VERY much with this poem.