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    whipers in the dark, "i hear you"
    i hear you.. as she looks for the voice so near
    i hear your voice calling for me, but where are you?
    looking as if she was in fear

    nothing but darkness all around me
    as she hears a whiper "i need you"
    just so dark it make it were she couldn't see..
    lost and confused hearing you say, "i hope to see you soon"

    then comes a bright light
    then she scrams "where are you!"
    as an image comes in sight
    stand still not knowing what to do

    tears falls down her face then whispers "i see you"
    starts to run as she sees you appear
    trys to reach for you as the wind blew
    can't belive your here

    holds you close in my arms
    looks at you with a smile
    in her face looking alarmed
    he looks at her saying, "its been awile"

    then it all gose dark... where are you?
    as she starts to see you disappear she scrams "no! you can't go!"
    as tears fall down her face not knowing what to do
    closes her eyes then opens them then she would see a glow

    then she awakens and sits up with a sad look
    with tears coming down her face it was just a dream...
    lays back down what a mistake
    to think he was really here.. she says, "i could just scream!"
    Last edited by sogood01; 01-09-2010 at 12:58 PM.
    *~A moment like this we will never be able to go back. Holding you like this wanting the time to stop. Just the two of us we don't need words.~*



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    Wow you are getting better ^^ keep up the good work

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    The days fly by and the feelings remain
    So far away and causing us pain
    That's okay we'll make it through
    Soon we'll get to say "I love you"



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    amazing your best one till now and less mistakes now bravo you should get reps on this from me
    ~ai~rox~

    Thanks teed for the site info

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    I agree with ultra maniac. This poem was your best one. Its meaning more clear as your wordsmithing has improved. It still had spelling and other mistakes such as "lays back down what a mistook"
    it should be mistake because mistook is a verb and a past tense.
    But i applaud your improvement and effort! Well done! It was entertaining.

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    ^_^ thank you so much. i tried hard on this one.
    *~A moment like this we will never be able to go back. Holding you like this wanting the time to stop. Just the two of us we don't need words.~*



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