Life in a new light

[.Miki~]

Hrmm. I wrote this not too long ago. It is alright in my opinion, deffinately not my best work, but I havn't posted anything in a while, so, enjoy.

Spinning in a pirouette of time
Breaking through the endless lies
Even though I think you mine
We still hear the meaningless cries
I Dance till my heart's decay
Then watch it shatter among wraiths
How did we become to betray?
Was it every solitude mistake?
I Dream with the Insane
Though my thoughts are mine
And even though I am not "sane"
My whispers are a sullen crime
Weaving a web of endless thoughts
While banishing voices on contact
Never again, I be distraught
My mind is forever unwrapped

[ultra_maniac]

its good but somethings caught my eyes well you can add somethings in it small mistakes i ll say
like you should have added *are*in between you and mine
* Even though I think you mine*
then endless thought of time that should have given the grace
well over all it was very good just keep on writing

[kisses2]

I liked it! It was nice. Keep writing poems and they'll get better and better! Good job. (:

[Yuna]

I loooveee your word choices!
The first phrase made me go, "omg, that sounds so cool." Lol.
"I dream with the insane" is another one I love.

I can't wait to see what else you create! :3

[.Miki~]

thank you so much... i enjoy the feedback =)