One more time.

[Anime-Prince]

Behold the feeling when you knocked me to the ground
All strong as you stood above me waving your flag in victory
But peaceful contemplation does not bring me down
Look who's still standing all the way through history.

You want me to stand and go one on one man to man
Throw my punches and electric kicks, push you back into your ego
Does it bother you I reply through word of mouth instead of with my hand
Or that your attempts to rouse an energetic response are really quite feeble

But you stand there on your mound hill of mud
Shouting to the world letting them know how 'hard you are'
Flaunting and taunting like every 'big man' should
If your compassion was as big as your neck im sure you'd go far

But really let's just add this up now shall we
Your at home taking god knows what for god knows why
In your attempt to get high you've sacrificed being free
Or maybe covering up the fact that your ashamed to cry..

Carry on bullying cause the victims are stronger than you'll ever know
Your power was never as big as your will to hurt
And some day when your spent and wandering through the cold snow
Maybe you'll taste the self karma induced dirt..

[ELR]

The flow was good, the feeling was open in it. I enjoyed the reasoning behind the poem, I hope you keep writing, I know I'll be reading them.

[Rein*]

Strong message, i like it.

[SigmaSD]

Wow its been so long since I read one of your poems. I really enjoyed this piece because of the message it was trying to get across. You did forget to quote "Does it bother you" in the second stanza, and also there should be a coma between one and man so that it reads "one to one, man to man".

The thing I like about this poem most is the way you use words to express your feelings for this individual. You're harsh yet you pity the person for whats in store to come for them. Nice Job.

[Anime-Prince]

Thank you very much. Constructive criticism noted :-)

:-) You guys are awesome.