A Voice

[*Tsuki*]

Oh, my. . . it has been too long since I've posted a new poem. I apologize. *bows*
Now. . . about the poem . . . I haven't really gone over it, and it's pretty short without the repeated parts. >.< I'm not sure if it will actually make sense in the ending, and if you'll go "oooh, now I get it!" But, I hope so. I also hope you like it. As always, thanks for reading. *Tsuki*
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A Voice

I am the one,
sitting out in the rain,
waiting for a chance,
to tell him I love him.

This is my voice,
this is my voice,
this is my voice,
I change it.

I am the one,
standing on the beach,
waiting for me love,
to return to this place.

This is my voice,
this is my voice,
this is my voice,
I change it.

I am the one,
who calls to the sky,
right after my best friend dies.

This is my voice,
this is my voice,
this is my voice,
I change it.

I am the one,
watching over my friends.
So we can have,
our own place of peace.

This is my voice,
this is my voice,
this is my voice,
I change it.

We are the ones,
who died in the gunfire,
we are the forgotten souls.

This is our voice,
this is our voice,
this if our voice,
can you hear it?

[Anime Forum]

Not your best work, I'm sorry.
The flow was good but I see towards the end you struggled a bit, that may or not be true but it kinda seems that way. The poem is still better than average and I know you can do this.

[*Tsuki*]

^^ aww, thanks. I've had trouble writing anything, lately.
My brain is fried from school. -_-
Oh, well! I'll do better, next time! =D

[Anime Forum]

^^ aww, thanks. I've had trouble writing anything, lately.
My brain is fried from school. -_-
Oh, well! I'll do better, next time! =D

I know how you feel, school is annoying and I have a question.
Do you plan to publish your work? You really should.

[*Tsuki*]

*nods* definately a nuisance.

*thinks* Hmm . . . I'm not sure. I've never thought about that. . .
Don't think they're good enough to be published.

[Teddy2116]

AWESOME!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
omg that was great sis, i love it with a passion

[*Tsuki*]

lol. Thanks bro. Way to show your enthusiasm. XD

[Rein*]

it was good..I enjoyed reading..It really wasn't your best but its tnot the worse, so yay you!

[ELR]

Something didn't seem right, the last part you have 'this is my voice' twice, then you have 'this if my voice'. Did you do that on purpose? I liked it, didn't love it but still. You did your best at least. The repeating of 'This is my voice' seemed a little over board but it is the way you wrote it so it is fine if it is how you want it. Keep writing and if school is blowing your mind then you can take a break from writing, no one will take it against you.

[*Tsuki*]

@Rein*: haha, yea. It's not as good as I'd like it to be. . . Next one will have to be better! ^^
@GreatAuntieEnvious: Oops! That was a typo. >.< So, no, that wasn't planned. >.< Thank you for your input, though. ^_^

I must, now, go post a new poem. *crosses fingers* I hope it's good!