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    My second attempt at a poem - Criticise as you please

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    Underneath the skin
    This wound grows
    Reminding me of this sin
    As a blanket of guilt begins to sowe

    There is no name
    For this guilt inside
    Just the intention to mame
    And make this wound wide

    Im begging it to leave
    As it tugs on my heart
    And begins to cleave
    Tearing it apart

    I didnt expect this
    When our eyes first met
    To our first kiss
    And the buying of our pet

    But you are this guilt
    You are tearing up my heart
    No chance to be rebuilt
    We are to be forever apart

    Always eternally
    You will be My first love
    Just to be parted
    Is our fate....


    hehe i was in a sad mood...



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    That's a pretty good poem. I think a little more work could make it better. It is very nice though.


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