Everything Falls Apart

[ELR]

I don't normally write anything before, but I am noting that this was just written, no editing done to it yet, had to get stuff out of my head.
__________________________________________________ ________

Everything Falls Apart

Everything falls apart
Getting blamed for what has been,
Yelled at for all that is wrong.
Been on my feet all day,
Tears held back from all to see,
Body past its breaking point.
"I did type up the papers."
He throws them back at me.
"Do them again,
You wrote them wrong."
Only a kid, I am,
Relationship problems from friends.
Blamed for the steal,
Cooking things wrong,
Miss taking orders,
Everything falls apart.
Hiding in the bathroom,
Tears running down my face,
Smeared with eye liner.
Can't take anymore-
The noose tightening around my neck.
Everything falls apart.
And when it does,
The one to blame is me...

[CrystalAce]

Well, it really seems like an outpour of your emotions of the situation at that time. But if you want, you may make it more rythmic.

All the same,....nice job! Good poem ^ ^ !

[Anime Forum]

Well you did decent =]

I don't know how much I can say about this poem but you know, I have seen much worse and well keep up the good work and with practice and time you'll get better.