Left out~

[luz~]

She's sitting there all alone
while others chanted about her clone
her sister her twin
she the bright and she's the shadow
lost and sad
just a twin of another

a false a fake
lost in her wake
oh the joy she though sadisticly
sadly she left
not meant for her to be...

[SigmaSD]

The first paragraph needs some work, but second paragraph is good. I like the first two lines "a false a fake, lost in her wake". The first paragraph is confusing because of the line that reads, "She the light and she's the shadow".

Did you get the idea of this from the book My Sister's Keeper. 'Cause the poem would make a lot of sense then.

[seraphic_demon]

she the bright and she's the shadow

I think it would've worked better if it goes like this:

She the "bright" (or light, you decide), and her "the shadow".

over all, the poem is good, needs a little tweak but still good enough.

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[Azul]

Does anyone know what is happening in the post before mine? Anyway back to the topic at hand, the poem. It was what some would call short and spicy.

These two lines ~a false a fake
lost in her wake~ stand out to me too. I personally found it to be a good poem.