Missing You...

[rEikAbLeU]

i wrote this when i was inlove with somebody, before...
hope you guys give me comments and critisism, thank you...


I am wond’ring what your doing right now?
are you sleeping or just like me, somehow?
wishing that days would go on fast,
so i could see you at last…

It pains my heart to not see your face,
and i’m starting to feel really strange,
why am i missing you so bad?
oh, things are getting so sad…

I’m missing you badly,
i wanted to plead insanity,
i want to forget the reality,
that, maybe, you’re not coming back to me…

I don’t really own your heart , which is true,
But i’m hoping that somehow,
you’re missing me too
the way i do, when i think of you…

[rEikAbLeU]

no CnC yet?

sad...

[Rein*]

its lovely. It kinda made me sad and it was also a very clear door way into my current situation so i enjoyed reading it. Brought up a lot of feeling.

[SigmaSD]

You should write a book or something 'cause I really like your poetry. It flows well, and your word choice really adds a lot of imagery to your poems. Nice Job.

PS- It's too bad I can't give you some rep, 'cause the site won't let me.

[wordfarer]

Your first stanza suggests you are going to structure a AABB rhyme scheme, then it changes on the word "strange" (nice touch if you meant to throw in a turning point, otherwise I have to clear up that "face" and "strange" are not even slant rhymes).
That said, there cannot be guidelines by which poetry strictly follows in a consistent structure or style, or absolutely intentional fashion. As a medium, it is meant to be full of personal emotions and images. I envy it for existing as a piece of poetry; I have an assortment of troubles trying to openly express myself.
Well done for freely creating outside of insecurity

[rEikAbLeU]

thank you for all the critisism and appreciations of my work...
thank you very much...

[theDC]

As far as i see now you have your own style. I like reding it.

The romantic lines, the fluing sentiments, you put that very well here too.
What inspires you?

[rEikAbLeU]

As far as i see now you have your own style. I like reding it.

The romantic lines, the fluing sentiments, you put that very well here too.
What inspires you?

what inspires me?

i dunno, maybe i guess it's my sadness, i only write poems when im really sa and down... weird right? but i really can't right when i feel happy or fine...

[Rein*]

I know wat u mean when I'm happy I don't write either. It never made any sense

[theDC]

Think in something special, something important to you, family, something you want to stay always carved in the history by a post for them...
Don't you fell inspirated?
But well, sadness is a felling you can't control or even let it go so is very powerfull to make and keep tha all of the moment. A Strong felling is a strong inpiration.
Also you want to share this, to show you to world, to being hear.

Do you fell better after wright, even when you're sad?

[rEikAbLeU]

Think in something special, something important to you, family, something you want to stay always carved in the history by a post for them...
Don't you fell inspirated?
But well, sadness is a felling you can't control or even let it go so is very powerfull to make and keep tha all of the moment. A Strong felling is a strong inpiration.
Also you want to share this, to show you to world, to being hear.

Do you fell better after wright, even when you're sad?

i really can't get any inspiration when im happy, if it's poem im going to write, like right now, i haven't write for a long time, some months...

yeah, it makes me a little better after writing...

[Necro'lic Enigma]

Thats a lovely poem , it seems you have all worked out on it.
What made keep reading this poem was the flow which it had it in , it was sad , it was with tears and it made me stick into it.
Lovely work.
Hope you post some more poems please.

[Anime Forum]

This poem can be described in 3 words =]

- Lovely

- Amazing

- Sad

I loved it....simply amazing.

[rEikAbLeU]

This poem can be described in 3 words =]

- Lovely

- Amazing

- Sad

I loved it....simply amazing.

thank for the lovely thoughts... thank for liking my work bro...
^_^

[Foph]

its lovely. It kinda made me sad and it was also a very clear door way into my current situation so i enjoyed reading it. Brought up a lot of feeling.

I agree. It portrayed a great deal of feeling. It's also a very common circumstance, so more people could understand it.

[rEikAbLeU]

Thats a lovely poem , it seems you have all worked out on it.
What made keep reading this poem was the flow which it had it in , it was sad , it was with tears and it made me stick into it.
Lovely work.
Hope you post some more poems please.

i guess i have two more work posted here in the poem section of af...

this and this are the links to it...

[Magical Soul]

I totally know this feeling, me right now.

Really good.

[Dr. Evil]

Bravisimo! You should write more, like SigmaSD suggested.

[Bun-chan]

i really, really like this poem. it makes me think about how it is when you lose someone you love, and how it would feel to lose someone close to you. i wish i could write as good as you do

[rEikAbLeU]

@Bunny Feet , of course you can write good stuffs too, you just have to practice and do it by heart.

@Blood_Storm, thank you very much... ^_^

@Magical Soul, glad you like my poem...

there are other two poems here which i wrote:

Girl in the Mirror and Why You?
if you wanna read it, just kindly search it here, thanks...

[Senjou_Akira]

It's a beautiful one. I agree with everyone's praises.