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Wait while I vomit.
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Once, I was at the park and say these two guys making out. And until right now, that was the gayest thing I've ever seen. Gratz.
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Was this supposed to be propoganda?
...(sighs heavily)...
There's a rash of misspellings, a couple of copy-and-pasted pictures, cheesy religious references, and an irrelevant title.
This is dangerously toxic waste, to be incinerated immediately for the good of humanity.
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...Sickening (shudders)...
Well I am not one to crush creativity (looks up). But this does need work. Try to focus more on the tale that you are telling, rather than matching words to fit images which do not link togther well.
Also, this site has a fan fiction section; take a wander through some of the stories posted there and note the comments and improvments other suggest. It takes a lot of practice and effort to get a really good story together - but its rewarding when you finaly finish the last sentance
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Quote Eris:
There are no rules. They are just words on a piece of paper.
Until last year, It was the worng thing for me to do but,I stepped into the girls bathroom at the worng time at school.Two girls(doing stuff I didn't even know was possible) was the nastiyest thing i've seen so far.
I was planning to keep it that way to.............Thanks for ruining it!
Set by me.
I was Hieko.
Thank you Caelus - that's quite enough now - you have voiced your opinion, no need to go further
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Quote Eris:
There are no rules. They are just words on a piece of paper.
So, what drug? I mean really "SHE TOOK DRUGS OMGNOES" doesn't really suit something like that. Did she overdose due to misinformation or simply immaturity? Had she just blindly taken whatever was given to her without considering what it was? Was the drug on its own relatively safe, but had something dangerous cut into it? There's a lot more you should flesh out for such a pivotal moment in the story.
Of course, I don't expect you to, but if you really are serious you should probably look this stuff up.
Visit the Toy Dungeon Studios Store and buy a shirt or zipper pull, damnit!
I do not see the need for one member to bully another member. If you can justify this then please go ahead.
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Quote Eris:
There are no rules. They are just words on a piece of paper.
...And this little story took how long to come up with? Thirty, maybe fourty seconds? And thats pushing it a bit. If your going to make a story, make it original and actually think on the storyline for a bit. And on a sidenote, what the HELL is up with the "She took drugs and this is what happened to her" and showing a punk/emo chick. Gee, thanks. Apparently we're all druggies now, thank you for following that stereotype. And second of all, did you even do this for the purpose of writing a story? Or was it just so you could make a pretty picture in paint? Sorry, Im usually not mean like this but please think things through before starting a thread.
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