InuYasha Fanfiction: All is Well, 'Till Love Comes 'Round

**xX.Leara.Xx Koga's Lover** · 11-17-2007 02:41 PM

Huff... Huff... A streak of black, racing through the trees. "RARGH! My shards! Bring them back, you hanyou!" It echoes throughout the silent trees. She looks over her shoulder. The huge red demon was still chasing her. She panted harder, her black wolf-like tail almost wrapped around her leg. A light pink glow shone around her right leg, making a pink streak near the ground. "I never did anything!" She screamed aloud to the demon chasing her. Her hair fell in her face, causing her to trip and fall over a dead tree. The demon laughed and swung his large, broad sword, striking trees around, making them fall. Her heart pounded aginst her chest, her black wolf ears pressed against her head. "What now... What now?!" She asked herself. The demon began to loom over her, sneering. Her hand, slowly reached over her shoulder to one of her swords, and she grasped it. The demon had his hand on the hilt of his sword, that he accidentally put back. With a yell, she threw the sword at the demons neck. It hit and stuck straight in. It coughed and wheezed, while she got up. The demon gave one last scream and fell. Leara walked over and removed the sword, curling her nose at the demons stench. "No one messes with me... Even if I'm only half...."

Edited because of comments and new ideas. Hope you like it

((Okay, so this is based off of InuYasha. My apoligies if I did this wrong, I'm new at this. If you like it, please let me know! ^^ Then , I'll post more, other wise, oh well...))

**CrimsonMoon** · 11-18-2007 08:47 PM

Frankly, I can't say that I like this story just yet. It's very brief and I don't have any idea why the demon chased her. Just because she was a halfling or something else? '...she gasped it' should be '...she grasped'. Otherwise your presentation is fine. I just need to see the plot of your story. Considering you're new, it's pretty good. Good luck! =>