Desire

[Howling Star]

I desire
I was free
Thats how I want it to be
It puts my heart in fire

To be free with youre live
To walk around on youre own
But I dont have to be alone
A familie with an wive

It wil be so great
being together
That wil be so much better
I just need to have some faith

[Ichiro Matsuchani]

Again, as I have noticed with your previous poems, simplistic and shallow. Also, the grammar mistakes only make it harder to read. I get what you are trying to say, but I think you can add a bit of detail upon that.

[Howling Star]

Hmm I think its probely cause I dont get it at all. All I can add is ''This is the pits''

[dream magician]

Wow,another poem!
It's nice!!!!Keep up the good work but i do have to agree with Ichiro Matsuchani,but i know you can do it!!!