Rainy Day without You.

[Atara Inferno]

(I did something really really stupid again. TT.TT Sorry, Brody, it was an accident. Anyways, here's is my poem, again. Atleast I corrected them. ^.^;; And enjoy!)

Rainy Day Without You.

Sitting right here in the lonely room
Looking into the drizzling night
And thinking nothing else
But it's another rainy day and I'm blue
It reminds me of the day you went away
On the rainy days is when I'm missing you
There's nothing I could do to make you stay
You took the sunshine and stars above
You took the rainbow and pot of gold
You took my soul when you betrayed my love.
I'll miss you in the days when I am old
And now, I sit and look out at the rain
Like teardrops falling from my misted eyes
I wounded and feel alot of pain
A pain that leaves me crippled deep inside
They say the rain will comfort and caress
Then why am I in such an horrible mess

[lorie]

That was really good skyla ^^
I'm loving the feelings and the emotions that you dont really see come out in that poem. (and the rhymes xP)
More!

[FaroDomisai]

Awwww, Skyla its so sad...but beautiful, you show so much emotion in your poems <333 I love it...it almost made me cry again

[Zan Voaga]

Yes, very well done Skyla. The meaning of the peom is nicly put and clearyl said. I think it was a good poem for people who've been in a situation that you described because it really cuts into a persons heart...in a good way.

[Capernicus]

...I can't say that I really like it. I mean, I am teary, but that's because I am sick and my eyes leak by themselves. Your poem is...ok. The last 2 lines I like the most, because they actually SOMEWHAT have pentameter and good rhyme. The rest I don't really care for.