kill me

[LittleMomo]

Hurry up and kill me,
so I can get this over with,
it's over, now kill me.
I had a great life,
too bad that I didn't live long enough,
I didn't become a loving father,
I didn't accomplished my dreams,
I sorry I wasn't good enough world,
just to make others happy,
just to make my friends happy,
but now, it's gone,
my light is about to fade,
there's not much I can do.
Just please end this,
by simply killing me.
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...enjoy

[animeangellover]

you continue to make interesting poems! ^_^

[chii-fan-lover]

that is sad jumpy.... y r u sad?
dont be sad, cuz then its.... its just sad.
be happy! we love u!!
btw me like ur poem!! ^^

[Knuffle Bunny]

All your poems are based on some deep topic. @.@
But they're very interesting reads^^

[Yukari]

Very sad but very well writen. You are one of the best writers here

[yami hatake]

It's a sad poem..I hope you're okay..

Good poem JFL, but it kinda didn't have a flow, well keep them comeing.

[Daenerys]

Ugh. I'm seriously getting tired of seeing poems like THIS, get such high praise, yet poems about SOMETHING, and that weren't plagerized every other word, get nothing.

Poems have to have substance, they have to MEAN something, and have something that flows. ALL poems have to flow. Even Haiku's flow. This poem was lacking flow. It was lacking substance, and it made NO SENSE in my eyes.

All you did was take a thought, someone killing you. Or how you wanted to be killed, and you went off of it. That doesn't make a poem, it makes a string of thoughts.

I'm getting really sick of reading bad poetry in here, and I'm not going to take it anymore. This is why I never reply to poems, because I never have anything nice to say.