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For the following verse,



Kanashimi ga ima seeraa sumairu
Kiseki wo okosu no seeraa uingu
Dare datte kagayaku hoshi wo motsu
Makenai! Ashita e seeraa eeru
Zettai! Tsukamaeru! Seeraa sutaa
Kono chikai todoke ginga made

Before:


Give sadness now a sailor smile
Bringing a miracle, a sailor wing
Everybody carries a shining star inside
I won't give up! To tomorrow, a sailor yell
For sure! I will catch it! The sailor star
Let this vow sound through the whole galaxy

After:


Sadness is in this sailor smile
A miracle arises from sailor wings
Everyone carries a shining star
I won't give up! To tomorrow, a sailor yell
For sure! I will catch the sailor star
Let this oath sound throughout the galaxy

Rationale: The first line is incorrect and needed to be amended. The second line is a matter of preference but the new suggestion matches the style of the first line. There is no 'inside' on the third line so it was removed in the suggestion.



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For the following verse,



Kurushisa ga ima seeraa aizu
Kiseki wo okosu no seeraa uingu
Dare datte unmei no hoshi wo motsu
Makenai! Ashita e seeraa eeru
Zettai! Tsukamaeru! Seeraa sutaa
Kono chikai todoke ginga made

Before:


Give sadness now my sailor eyes
Bringing a miracle, a sailor wing
Everybody carries a star of fate inside
I won't give up! To tomorrow, a sailor yell
For sure! I will catch it! The sailor star
Let this vow sound through the whole galaxy

After:


Pain is in these sailor eyes
A miracle arises from sailor wings
Everybody carries a star of fate
I won't give up! To tomorrow, a sailor yell
For sure! I will catch the sailor star
Let this oath sound throughout the galaxy

Rationale: The first line is incorrect and needed to be amended. The second line is a matter of preference but the new suggestion matches the style of the first line. There is no 'inside' on the third line so it was removed in the suggestion.