In Need Of Help... Again lol.

[Deviate]

I'm sorry for being a bother, but I need assistance again. Lol..

I have a English 1102 Definition Essay due tonight by 11:45. It's only supposed to be 5 paragraphs long. Anyways, my English professor this semester is super strict and marks off 15 points or so for every fragment. I always place my commas in the wrong spot. Lol.. Any English majors or someone willing to look over my essay let me know. ^^

[Xeyuzio]

Are you 13? Why not put it through Word? At least post it, I could probably help.

[Deviate]

Are you 13? Why not put it through Word? At least post it, I could probably help.

Wesley Benton
Jean M. Zhuno
ENGL 1102
24rd Feb 2013

What Is Success; Financial or Happiness?

What is the American dream? Is it to have the upmost “success” in your tine of life? Many may think it means to own a house, a speedy car, and have financial freedom. Others may say it means to own a boat, cottage, an RV, or other superficial things. With that being said, does financial “success” mean happiness in one’s life? One definition that is rarely linked to the word “success” is - the accomplishment of an aim or purpose (Merriam-Webster).
One way a person may measure “success” is through someone’s happiness. Some people may feel that having luxurious items and expensive clothes, jewelry or even cars is happiness. However, this is not universally true and is consequently not a true measure of success. Being “successful” means an entirely different matter to other people. Some people may consider having a loving or happy family great “success”. Couples who have been married for 40 or more years may say that was a “success” in which equals happiness.
Another example of “success” could be health. A person who is obese could have lost a great deal of his or her weight. In doing so, they could very have well escaped catching a illness or disease. Type 2 Diabetes is caused by poor weight control, lack of exercise and poor diet. So someone who is obese and loses an exceptional amount of weight could have escaped the fate of living with type 2 diabetes. That persons “success” in losing weight led to him being happy.
What about people who overcome hardships, tough goals, and losses of loved ones? It can be said that have overcome their hardships and turned that pain and sorrow into “success” or happiness. A persons goal to maintain a 3.5 GPA in return for a scholarship, could lead to happiness in attaining it. . An individual that has overcome an obstacle achieves a measure of success. As David Brinkley has stated, a man can be proud if he has laid “a firm foundation with the bricks others have thrown at him.” The most valuable lessons can come from failures. Like Dale Carnegie said, “Discouragement and failure are two of the surest stepping stones to success.” And who could understand the meaning of success if they did not experience disappointment? Light would not exist without darkness and success would not be truly achieved without failure. But we all hope that this failure is only temporary.
People want to achieve success and make plans to reach it. However, with a narrow interpretation of success, many people have no chance of finding it. They will continue to find themselves going the wrong way, missing out on opportunities, and happy moments along the way.

[nrL]

Yeah, post it, we're dying to read it.

[Jozette]

5 paragraphs? Thats like this thread.