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My First Poem: Random Thoughts
Hallelujah is the word I sing today
‘Cause heavenly grace must be spread away
My spirits will rise and be exalted
For good actions should not be halted
I feel in peace and I feel joy
Keeping in mind this is no decoy
And when the rough times arrive
Against myself I’ll have to strive
Day by day should I freely live
The best of me trying to achieve
Loving, helping, respecting, caring
Since every soul needs some repairing
The sallow day is soon ending
And my own self still needs some mending
But shall I not wonder and scatter
This is the end, my very last drop of gray matter
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Originally Posted by
KyouFalls
T-T, I love it.
Really?! :D
How nice of you, thanks a lot! :)
This was indeed the first poem I wrote in English and it took me only like 5 minutes to do it so I was not expecting that it came out very good, glad you think different :p
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In my opinion it's really good.
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Originally Posted by
KyouFalls
In my opinion it's really good.
Arigato gozaimasu! :D Glad you liked it ^^
So maybe I'll write another poem soon :)
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Love it ^_^
Very good!!
A lot happier than any of my poems have ever written. lol
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Originally Posted by
AshureeChan
Love it ^_^
Very good!!
A lot happier than any of my poems have ever written. lol
Glad you liked it :D
Ha ha, I just wrote what came to my mind in the moment, searched on http://www.rhymezone.com/ for words that rhymed the end of the previous verse and then made up the following, 5 minutes or so :p
I guess I can also write some sad poems :p Gotta give the poet I have in me another tries xD
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Originally Posted by
Uchiha_Luffy
Glad you liked it :D
Ha ha, I just wrote what came to my mind in the moment, searched on
http://www.rhymezone.com/ for words that rhymed the end of the previous verse and then made up the following, 5 minutes or so :p
I guess I can also write some sad poems :p Gotta give the poet I have in me another tries xD
Mine always come out depressing XD
But anyway very good job :)
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Originally Posted by
AshureeChan
Mine always come out depressing XD
But anyway very good job :)
Ha ha, guess you should then read this poem more often and also read and watch even more manga/animes to cheer you up as to start writing non-depressing poems xD
Thanks again, glad you liked it :) I think it came out pretty good for a first try :p
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Originally Posted by
Uchiha_Luffy
Ha ha, guess you should then read this poem more often and also read and watch even more manga/animes to cheer you up as to start writing non-depressing poems xD
Thanks again, glad you liked it :) I think it came out pretty good for a first try :p
Hmmm idk lol xD
You're welcome!
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So beautiful! Q-Q *tears of joy*
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cool you should make a haiku. *sobing* This is really good. T_T yep. (no really I love this and i'm not crying TT.
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Awesome Poem! I liked I it :D
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Sir, writes poems? Anyway, I guess you ARE some kind of artist although you can't draw anything. ^.^
Then again i don't know anything ... about everything you need imagination for.. or artistic feelings.
Keep it going.
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Originally Posted by
SIZARY-MOMO
So beautiful! Q-Q *tears of joy*
Glad you liked, Sizary nee-chan bro xD *tears of joy for your prase*
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Originally Posted by
Grell Loves Jozette
cool you should make a haiku. *sobing* This is really good. T_T yep. (no really I love this and i'm not crying TT.
Aw, glad you liked it that much, I'm really thankful :D
And please don't cry 'cause if you do so your eyes will be watery and therefore you won't be able to read my poem very well ah ah xD
Btw, what's an haiku? :p
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AnimeTrek
Awesome Poem! I liked I it :D
Thanks, glad you did :) It was my very first try in English, tough I used a website for finding rhymes a lot of faster.
Guess I should be posting more soon :D
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I really like Luffy! It made me feel better reading it. Isn't your poem how we should all feel every day when waking up? :) Thanks for posting it.
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Really nice for a first poem :) There really should be more happy poems :p
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Originally Posted by
Jacob's Ladder
I really like Luffy! It made me feel better reading it. Isn't your poem how we should all feel every day when waking up? :) Thanks for posting it.
Thank you and you're welcome my friend :D
I guess you're right, it should be how we should feel every day when waking up, guess we'd all be a lot of happier that way but it's too damn hard xD
And now I come to think of it I believe this poem should make you feel better bearing in mind your current situation, glad to know that I improved you mood, it really makes me feel proud of my poem :p
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Originally Posted by
Sc0tty
Really nice for a first poem :) There really should be more happy poems :p
Glad you enjoyed it :) It was not my first poem, I shall say, only the first I wrote in English (though being honest I think the last poem I wrote - in portuguese - was like 6 or 7 years ago, as a school homework, so guess we kinda may consider this my first post :p).
Yup, I have to agree with that, most poems are really sad about failing love, loosing somebody important for you, being depressed... and though I actually also like that kind of poems, those happier ones as I believe mine was (at least I tried it to be xD) please me a lot :D
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very, very, veryyyyyyyy nice :D Good job ;D
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Originally Posted by
Tsumiru
very, very, veryyyyyyyy nice :D Good job ;D
Oh, thanks, very nice of you my portuguese comrade :p
I'll post a new one (sad this time) today :)
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Good job for a first time. Continue like this, I'll read your next try too ;)
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Originally Posted by
Seraphin
Good job for a first time. Continue like this, I'll read your next try too ;)
Thak's for the support dude, it really feels good to hear that :D
Next poem (coming out in the next days) will be rather sad, will you still read it? :p
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ofc poetry is made to express sadness
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Seraphin
ofc poetry is made to express sadness
Yeah, but also joy, hope and self-contenpemnt as in my poem :p
I believe poetry exists from human's needs to express in a rather beautiful written structure all they feel about theirselves, all their joys, fears, random toughts, their feelings towards other persons and the world that surrounds them.
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Very nicely done for your first poem. For the most part everything flowed very nicely, I think I only had to catch myself once or twice with the flow being off a bit. But thats to be expected on a first poem.
Looking forward to seeing more.
As far as poetry only to be expressing sadness, not sure if ofc meant something else, cause I think most poetry expresses other feelings than sadness, unless your only doing emo poetry. :) Most songs are just a variation of poetry. Its how I used to write most of my stuff, when I used to write music. Start with the poem, to get the feeling of how the song should be, then put the beat to it and then tweak. :)