Slayers NEXT - Otome no Inori

More old Slayers songs! The lyrics of this one are closer to the mark but still have a lot of errors.

Active link: https://www.animelyrics.com/anime/sl...omenoinori.htm
Kanji: http://www.kasi-time.com/item-8503.html

Red: Incorrect lines
Orange: Possibly subjective lines
Green: Weirdly worded

Current translation:

To this small girl loving is
wonderful, my darling

A glistening rouge (a longful dream)
a pink peach
I want to reach for it - a maiden's prayer.

* I float to the night sky - the silver of this happiness
I like to shake the waves of darkness
my little heart is aching so profoundly
let my heart leap into your origin

I beg you, let me reach, it's this maiden's will
It's all I am, this pretty me.

To this small girl loving is
wonderful, my darling

I'm giddy, that cologne (a beautiful dream)
a light blue parasol
I wish it would come true - it's this maiden's will

* Repeat

I beg you, let me reach, it's this maiden's will
the last kiss is a boomerang
this boomerang is a ticket for a one way trip

It's all I am, this pretty me
I feel like I'm on top of a white pegasus
delivering the jigsaw of
love's last piece

Proposed revised translation:

Code:

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You're too dazzling for a girl in love with love
My Darling

A sparkling rouge (A yearning dream)
A pink peach
I hope this maiden's prayer reaches you

* Floating through the night sky on a little silver boat
Rocked by waves of love and hate
It makes my little heart ache
My heart flies to your side

Please carry there this maiden's prayer
I offer all my pure self to you

You're too dazzling for a girl in love with love
My Darling

A dizzying cologne (A twinkling dream)
A light blue parasol
I hope this maiden's prayer comes true

* Repeat

Please carry there this maiden's prayer
The kiss I threw is a boomerang
A boomerang on a one-way trip

I offer all my pure self to you
I want to place my feelings upon a white Pegasus
And send them to you
The final puzzle piece of love

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Also the "shiroi PEGASASU ni omoi nosete" of the third to last line in the transliteration should be "shiroi PEGASASU ni omoi wo nosete"

Similarly to the other thread, I've updated the kanji and corrected the romaji error, but @bluepenguin will have to handle the translation replacement.

@Fuukanou
Yep, no worries! Just wanted to get them posted. I may be posting a few more if I run into them- or should I just PM Blue instead if they're full redoes of older lyrics like these?

I'm not sure (I've only become a mod relatively recently so there's a lot to learn), but I would suggest you continue posting them here, because the general rule is that you only PM if it's a song that you've already posted a transliteration or translation for. Even though there's no "original poster" to consult/justify themselves with these old lyrics, I think it's worth keeping in threads if not for anything else for posterity and the possible chance of double-checking. Obviously if bluepenguin says PMs are alright then go right ahead.

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Originally Posted by Fuukanou

Even though there's no "original poster" to consult/justify themselves with these old lyrics, I think it's worth keeping in threads if not for anything else for posterity and the possible chance of double-checking.

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Yeah, I'm in agreement on this.

Anyway, the translation looks good and I've added it.