Aku no Hikari
12-17-2010, 12:07 PM
Hi. This is one of the easier songs, but I have a couple questions, and I need feedback on my translation style.
あなたは誰なのだろう こんなに揺れているの
アタシは何故 眠れないのか教えて
anata wa dare nano darou konna ni yurete iru no
atashi wa naze nemurenai no ka oshiete
I wonder who you are, as I'm trembling like this
Why can't I fall asleep? Tell me
あなただけこんなに強く傍にいてほしいと
つまづき 痛みを感じて初めて気付いた
anata dake konna ni tsuyoku soba ni ite hoshii to
tsumadzuki itami o kanjite hajimete kidzuita
When I wanted to be near you this much,
I realized I can't for the first time when I felt the pain
氷もいつかは溶けていく
そんな風にアタシもいれたら
こんな悩み事 どこかへと
吹き込んでゆくよ 追いかけてゆくよ 何度も
koori mo itsuka wa tokete iku
sonna fuu ni atashi mo iretara
konna nayamigoto dokoka e to
fukikonde yuku yo oikakete yuku yo nandomo
Even ice will melt away someday
If I could be there this way too
This anxiety... How far is it going to
be haunting and chasing me over and over?
I'm sure I did something wrong here. It's not even remotely a question (even when you listen to the song), but it didn't make sense any other way... or at least I couldn't word it in a way that makes sense in English other than this.
繰り返して いつの日にか 冷たい体抱いて
あなただけに ほら、みせてあげる
ガラスのようなココロを
kurikaeshite itsu no hi ni ka tsumetai karada daite
anata dake ni hora, misete ageru
garasu no youna kokoro o
Embrace my cold body again someday,
Only to you, look, I'll show you
my glass-like heart
I think the て form is meant to be taken as a state. (i.e., "As you embrace my cold body again someday")
あなたには言えないけれど こんなに震えてるの
流れて雲の行方みたいだよな 見えない
anata ni wa ienai keredo konna ni furuete'ru no
nagarete kumo no yukue mitai da yo na mienai
Though I can't say it to you, as I'm shivering like this,
It's like the course of the clouds... I can't see where we're flowing
氷もいつかは溶けてゆく
そんな風にアタシは思うの
花びらみたくキレイなまま
この空に チルノ? この涙 チルノ? 教えて
koori mo itsuka wa tokete yuku
sonna fuu ni atashi wa omou no
hanabira mitaku kireina mama
sono sora ni chiru no? kono namida chiru no? oshiete
I think that this way,
Ice will also melt away someday
I want to see petals in their beauty,
Will they fall to the sky? Will those tears fall? Tell me
欲しいけれど いつかの間にか 遠く離れていく
あなただけは そばにいるなんて 不器用だけど思ってた
ふわり ふわり 落ちていく 花びらみたいね…
hoshii keredo itsuka no ma ni ka tooku hanarete iku
anata dake wa soba ni iru nante bukiyou dakedo omotte'ta
fuwari fuwari ochite iku hanabira mitai ne...
I want you, but before I knew it we were far away from each other
I was awkward being near you
We're like flowers softly falling down, aren't we...
それでも 季節は過ぎ もう一度会えたなら
あなただけになら 伝えられる
ガラスのようなココロを
soredemo kisetsu wa sugi mou ichido aeta nara
anata dake ni nara tsutaerareru
garasu no you na kokoro o
But still, this season will be over, if I could see you again
If it's you, I will be able to tell you about
my grass-like heart
いますぐ 会いにいくわ 冷たい体抱いて
あなただけに ほら、見せてあげる 白い雪に舞う花を
ふわり ふわり のぼってく 風花を抱いてる
imasugu ai ni iku wa. tsumetai karada daite
anata dake ni hora, misete ageru shiroi yuki ni mau hana o
fuwari fuwari nobotte'ku kaze hana o daite'ru
I'll come to see you now. Embrace my cold body
Only to you, look, I'll show you flowers dancing in the white snow
Softly, softly ascending and embracing the flowers in the wind
By the way, Liz Tora make beautiful songs. And lily-an's vocals are the best.
Anyway, thanks in advance.
あなたは誰なのだろう こんなに揺れているの
アタシは何故 眠れないのか教えて
anata wa dare nano darou konna ni yurete iru no
atashi wa naze nemurenai no ka oshiete
I wonder who you are, as I'm trembling like this
Why can't I fall asleep? Tell me
あなただけこんなに強く傍にいてほしいと
つまづき 痛みを感じて初めて気付いた
anata dake konna ni tsuyoku soba ni ite hoshii to
tsumadzuki itami o kanjite hajimete kidzuita
When I wanted to be near you this much,
I realized I can't for the first time when I felt the pain
氷もいつかは溶けていく
そんな風にアタシもいれたら
こんな悩み事 どこかへと
吹き込んでゆくよ 追いかけてゆくよ 何度も
koori mo itsuka wa tokete iku
sonna fuu ni atashi mo iretara
konna nayamigoto dokoka e to
fukikonde yuku yo oikakete yuku yo nandomo
Even ice will melt away someday
If I could be there this way too
This anxiety... How far is it going to
be haunting and chasing me over and over?
I'm sure I did something wrong here. It's not even remotely a question (even when you listen to the song), but it didn't make sense any other way... or at least I couldn't word it in a way that makes sense in English other than this.
繰り返して いつの日にか 冷たい体抱いて
あなただけに ほら、みせてあげる
ガラスのようなココロを
kurikaeshite itsu no hi ni ka tsumetai karada daite
anata dake ni hora, misete ageru
garasu no youna kokoro o
Embrace my cold body again someday,
Only to you, look, I'll show you
my glass-like heart
I think the て form is meant to be taken as a state. (i.e., "As you embrace my cold body again someday")
あなたには言えないけれど こんなに震えてるの
流れて雲の行方みたいだよな 見えない
anata ni wa ienai keredo konna ni furuete'ru no
nagarete kumo no yukue mitai da yo na mienai
Though I can't say it to you, as I'm shivering like this,
It's like the course of the clouds... I can't see where we're flowing
氷もいつかは溶けてゆく
そんな風にアタシは思うの
花びらみたくキレイなまま
この空に チルノ? この涙 チルノ? 教えて
koori mo itsuka wa tokete yuku
sonna fuu ni atashi wa omou no
hanabira mitaku kireina mama
sono sora ni chiru no? kono namida chiru no? oshiete
I think that this way,
Ice will also melt away someday
I want to see petals in their beauty,
Will they fall to the sky? Will those tears fall? Tell me
欲しいけれど いつかの間にか 遠く離れていく
あなただけは そばにいるなんて 不器用だけど思ってた
ふわり ふわり 落ちていく 花びらみたいね…
hoshii keredo itsuka no ma ni ka tooku hanarete iku
anata dake wa soba ni iru nante bukiyou dakedo omotte'ta
fuwari fuwari ochite iku hanabira mitai ne...
I want you, but before I knew it we were far away from each other
I was awkward being near you
We're like flowers softly falling down, aren't we...
それでも 季節は過ぎ もう一度会えたなら
あなただけになら 伝えられる
ガラスのようなココロを
soredemo kisetsu wa sugi mou ichido aeta nara
anata dake ni nara tsutaerareru
garasu no you na kokoro o
But still, this season will be over, if I could see you again
If it's you, I will be able to tell you about
my grass-like heart
いますぐ 会いにいくわ 冷たい体抱いて
あなただけに ほら、見せてあげる 白い雪に舞う花を
ふわり ふわり のぼってく 風花を抱いてる
imasugu ai ni iku wa. tsumetai karada daite
anata dake ni hora, misete ageru shiroi yuki ni mau hana o
fuwari fuwari nobotte'ku kaze hana o daite'ru
I'll come to see you now. Embrace my cold body
Only to you, look, I'll show you flowers dancing in the white snow
Softly, softly ascending and embracing the flowers in the wind
By the way, Liz Tora make beautiful songs. And lily-an's vocals are the best.
Anyway, thanks in advance.