forever always eternal

[dragoninja]

did she run
did she lie
did she cry
is she shy
why wasnt i in her eye
ride the dragonfly
to the black rainbow in the sky
thankyou death when i die
music the universal language
forever beyond space and time
past the future
beyond the past
always and forver
music eternal

[Anime Forum]

Truthfully, it was not my type of poem, BUT you did an ok job. Maybe make it a little longer, but it is your poem so it is your choice, short poems are also nice, but I prefer longer ones, but that is just my opinion lol, I bet alot will disagree with me. Just keep up the poems and good luck, just post whatever comes to your heart when writing poems.

[dragoninja]

yeah.. i wasnt all there when i wrote this so its kinda hit and miss but i thought id post it and see what came of it.. o well :rolleyes:

[rEikAbLeU]

did she run
did she lie
did she cry
is she shy
why wasnt i in her eye
ride the dragonfly
to the black rainbow in the sky
thankyou death when i die
music the universal language
forever beyond space and time
past the future
beyond the past
always and forver
music eternal

this one is good, but i guess some letters are missing, maybe a typo...
"why wasn't it in her eyes"
and i guess you should try and put the proper punctuation marks, like ? or . or ,
hope you get what i mean...

[Rein*]

I see you like simple rhymes. Its ok but it could have been better
the rythmn of the poem was a little off in some parts but it was a sound effort.