Kazuhiro Jou
07-10-2007, 04:51 PM
*Jushin Liger - Ikari no Juushin and Kiseki no Juushin: The spacing for the two songs I submitted recently has been bugging me....
For 'Ikari no Juushin', there's one change I'd like you to make:
"The miracle bioarmor is feeling pain from battle
There's nothing to fear until you vanquish the vile god"
to
"The miracle biarmor is
feeling pain from battle
There's nothing to fear
until you vanquish the vile god"
so it will be four lines instead of two lines since it looks better to me.
*:"RAIGAA SOODO" ten wo kirisaku seinaru tsurugi should be
*"RAIGAA SOODO" ten wo kirisaku seinaru tsurugi
(The colon shouldn't be there and I don't remember seeing it there when I pasted the text from Notepad onto the lyrics submission form.)
For 'Kiseki no Juushin', the spacing is really bothering me.
-Line 4 should be brought up just after Line 3.
moagare moagare ikari no honoo
mewosamase mewosamase yasei no kokoro
ebareshimono yo kami no koe wo kike
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
should be
moagare moagare ikari no honoo
mewosamase mewosamase yasei no kokoro
ebareshimono yo kami no koe wo kike
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
-Lines 5 through 8 should be brought up a space after
"kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA"
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
inazuma ga soro wo kakenukeru
kokoro de yajuu ga hoeteiru
harukanarutoki wo koete yomigaeru
ikari no honoo wo makiokose
to
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
inazuma ga soro wo kakenukeru
kokoro de yajuu ga hoeteiru
harukanarutoki wo koete yomigaeru
ikari no honoo wo makiokose
-Lines 11 through 13 need to be brought up a space after
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
"SANDAA SOODO" imakono teni honoo no tsurugi
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
should be
"SANDAA SOODO" imakono teni honoo no tsurugi
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
And last, lines 22 through 24 need to be brought up a space after
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
"SANDAA FENIKKUSU" ima ashita ni habataku tsubasa
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
to
"SANDAA FENIKKUSU" ima ashita ni habataku tsubasa
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
Thanks for making the changes if possible,
Doushokutoaoiro (Kazuhiro Jou)
For 'Ikari no Juushin', there's one change I'd like you to make:
"The miracle bioarmor is feeling pain from battle
There's nothing to fear until you vanquish the vile god"
to
"The miracle biarmor is
feeling pain from battle
There's nothing to fear
until you vanquish the vile god"
so it will be four lines instead of two lines since it looks better to me.
*:"RAIGAA SOODO" ten wo kirisaku seinaru tsurugi should be
*"RAIGAA SOODO" ten wo kirisaku seinaru tsurugi
(The colon shouldn't be there and I don't remember seeing it there when I pasted the text from Notepad onto the lyrics submission form.)
For 'Kiseki no Juushin', the spacing is really bothering me.
-Line 4 should be brought up just after Line 3.
moagare moagare ikari no honoo
mewosamase mewosamase yasei no kokoro
ebareshimono yo kami no koe wo kike
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
should be
moagare moagare ikari no honoo
mewosamase mewosamase yasei no kokoro
ebareshimono yo kami no koe wo kike
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
-Lines 5 through 8 should be brought up a space after
"kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA"
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
inazuma ga soro wo kakenukeru
kokoro de yajuu ga hoeteiru
harukanarutoki wo koete yomigaeru
ikari no honoo wo makiokose
to
kiseki no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
inazuma ga soro wo kakenukeru
kokoro de yajuu ga hoeteiru
harukanarutoki wo koete yomigaeru
ikari no honoo wo makiokose
-Lines 11 through 13 need to be brought up a space after
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
"SANDAA SOODO" imakono teni honoo no tsurugi
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
should be
"SANDAA SOODO" imakono teni honoo no tsurugi
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" sekai wo yurugasu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
And last, lines 22 through 24 need to be brought up a space after
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
"SANDAA FENIKKUSU" ima ashita ni habataku tsubasa
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
to
"SANDAA FENIKKUSU" ima ashita ni habataku tsubasa
"SANDAA FAINARU SURASSHU" inochi ga moetatsu tatakai
POWER POWER RAIGAA
THUNDER THUNDER RAIGAA
ikari no juushin SANDAA RAIGAA
Thanks for making the changes if possible,
Doushokutoaoiro (Kazuhiro Jou)