Hate

[Sakura Holic]

I hate you!
So much!
You used me!
Swallow me,
Then spit me back out,
Like Im a nobody!!
Hmph!

I should'nt have fell for it...
Maybe I was too blind...
All this time...
And I didnt even see it comming...
'til now..
Im such a fool...

I Hate you so MUCH!
I WISH YOU'D JUST,
DIE!!!
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Hope you like my poem every one! Enjoy~

[.mystic]

lol >.<, does this link to your other poem? anyway- -- it tis very good. emotion is key.

[Sakura Holic]

Thanks for reading my poem. And no. I just made this up...

[.mystic]

lol, yes. i make my best poetry by making it up. good job.

[Daenerys]

I didn't really like it. It just seemed too random.

[Sakura Holic]

Aw. It's ok Ai. I understand. Thanks for commenting it. ^ ^
It helps alot.

[Serenith Youkai]

I liked it, is was random...but it's ok..still good.

[$~$KitteyClaws]

it was random but I can relate to that I have somone that is like that to me and I still want him as a friend but he hates me I dont wanna hate him back tho. Great poem tho ^_^

[Vendetta]

I didn't like it very much. There was no rythme or beat and just seemed like you where yelling at someone.

[Sakura Holic]

Well, Poems doesnt have to rhyme right?
o.O
And Thank You for telling me that. ^ ^
I think It took me up to another level.

[Vendetta]

Well, Poems doesnt have to rhyme right?
o.O
And Thank You for telling me that. ^ ^
I think It took me up to another level.
No, poems don't have to ryhme. But, if you want to make a good poem you should have so ryThme. If you read it aloud and it sounds funny then try to fix some things up.

[Daenerys]

Good poems don't have to rhyme. Good poems make you feel what the writer was feeling. Good poems have emotion and thought and etc put into them. Good poems make you want to cry, or laugh, or run away.

This poem didn't do any of that, so I don't see why you have to get defensive when someone gives thier own opinion on a poem.

No one yelled at me for my thoughts on it.