cry

[LittleMomo]

I cried in tears,
until I can shed no more,
because I'm having,
such a hard time,
true love can be painful,
it pierced through my heart,
making me cry for pain,
I cried and will keep going,
when I ran out of tears,
I get blood,
until I run out of blood,
I die crying,
because love has hit me again,
several times it hit me,
my heart reforms,
and gets ready again,
for the same moment,
the heart-breaking moment,
and she leaves me,
taking the dark in,
making me alone,
love, can you forgive me,
I'm crying out for you....
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[yami hatake]

Daisuke..I mean Lucky..it's a very sad poem..of course it's great..all your poems are..but you need to cheer up..there has to be a way..:( ~yami

[Daimasukí]

Good poem JFL, I really like it, but cheer up the light will come soon and will never leave you heart ^ ~! anyways keep them coming I really like your poems and so does everybody else.

[Aleyna]

hmmm...i thought i posted a comment on this poem

anyways that was really good lucky

daimasuki is right everybody likes your poems :D

[Daenerys]

I don't like your poems. I think it's vain to assume everyone does.

[Kiss of Death]

shut up. his all poems are great. i tried to read them all... well, maybe one day i will... and dont be sad, love will come to your heart and there will stay... i wish i could tell the same thing about myself...

[Doriimu]

If you're going to read this post, read it all to actually understand what I'm saying. Some of my posts have the tendency to get misunderstood ^^°

You can also let Brody have his opinion, I agree to him, but only partially. The poems are well-written, but one _could_ assume that there's too much feelings in it for it to believable. Sorry, it's only my opinion, it doesn't have to be the _truth_.

If jump_for_luck really feels that bad, well, I'm sorry for him and it's always good to express yourself through poetry. It makes your heart lighter.
In a way, the poem weirds me out a little bit, but I still like it.

And I must say, jump_for_luck, you have great friends on this forum. See how they all try to cheer you up? It would be nice if you cheered up a little, they are there for you (as much they can be through the internet ^^;)

[~Mithrosent~]

i like your poems. theres a sadness there that is real. but you need to cheer up! yeah i have pretty gloomy poems to so i cant say much lol. but try to find the sadness in the pain. theres a reason why you feel horrible in heart break and thats beacuse you loved someone. try writing about the love thru the heart ache! well i must be off to post some more on poetry :P bye!