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sakura_haruno25
06-27-2006, 12:49 PM
I sometimes think of the misdeeds I've done in life. There aren't alot, but I couldn't get out of the nightmares until I write a poem of it on paper. tell me what you think of it!

How often it is that one regrets
of the remorseful memories that haunts you yet
and through the mirths of the most gruesome fog,
you hear in your ears the echoes of its threats

lonely you are left in the darkness,
but deep in your saddened heart there
lies a small tint of courage that keeps you alive
though so faint it draws away your weakness

yet you tremble with a weary voice
begging so hard to rid the pain
it tortures you still in your conscience
but to end that fate is indeed your choice

Knuffle Bunny
06-27-2006, 12:56 PM
oooh. Your writing is so awesome!!!^^
ne of the best poems out there! Continue to write more!
And it actually rhymes. ;D

Yukari
06-27-2006, 01:09 PM
So sad but great poem. Keep up the great work can't wait till I see more

Daimasukí
06-27-2006, 03:49 PM
OOOOOO!!! I love dark poems!!, I love you poem! Great job! and the gruesome fog thing was awsome! Loved it and please, oh please keep writing more!!!!

Sana Kurata
06-27-2006, 06:11 PM
Awsome job I really like it alot. Like akari said one of the best poems here. good job keep it up!

Aleyna
06-27-2006, 11:43 PM
"tint of courage"

hah im gonna remember that line

good poem sakura_haruno :D

Daenerys
06-29-2006, 04:05 PM
I like it, but I don't like how you start to rhyme and then you don't, then you rhyme again. It's not very consistant.