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blacksun114
06-26-2006, 04:50 PM
It's weird to look back on it now

On how simple it should have been

If words could burn, I’d have the third degree

As I write this, I feel the cylinder on my head

Music in my heart fading, dying romantically

What’s done is done and what’s said is said

Moments from the decision sitting on my bed

Between living or ending myself on lead

Broken relationships are like knives to the gut

The sharper the pain the more my mind gets shut

The guillotine is set, my neck is bare

Lock and load, look me in the eye

You say you’re sorry as if you care

The gleam in your smile kills the lie

If what I see is Heaven, then I’ll declare

Your weight on the trigger got me there

animeangellover
06-26-2006, 07:42 PM
yay! that as cool! i liked it!^^

Nineteenth
06-26-2006, 08:46 PM
I rate it so-so.

Next time, don't rip off the title of metal songs.

Toughfairy101
06-28-2006, 01:37 PM
I liked your poem. It shows some past experiences. Good job keep writing.

blacksun114
06-28-2006, 01:43 PM
I rate it so-so.

Next time, don't rip off the title of metal songs.
I DID NOT RIP OFF ANYTHING!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Daenerys
06-28-2006, 01:52 PM
...Actually you did. Don't get angry because someone pointed out your theft.

Aleyna
06-28-2006, 03:20 PM
it was an ok poem

not 1 of my favorites of yours

still keep on writing though, don't let people's critisism stop u from writing blacksun :D

Daenerys
06-28-2006, 03:38 PM
Bloody, you're a moron. STEALING the title of a song, and using it to title a poem, is JUST as bad as claiming you WROTE the whole song.

blacksun114
06-29-2006, 12:10 PM
would anyone like to tell me what i supposedly stole?

Daenerys
06-29-2006, 12:16 PM
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You should too.