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wolf-on-the-hunt
06-25-2006, 04:53 PM
o.k. im posting this again the correct way so plz countinue to read ^.^
----------------begining---------------------
you said you loved me and never to fear
to come closer and you would hold me near
playing with my hair makeing it a mess
and i did love you i must confess
i trusted you and let you come close
and for that choice i regret the most
i let my gaurd down, i let you hold me
i didnt yell or try to flee because i loved you
and you loved me but then you turned your back you see
you grabbed me with all your might
you where stronger than me no matter how i fight
you comanded i liked it and it was o.k.
oh why did i trust you that day of all day's
you forced me when i said no
i begged and pleaded you let me go
you took control and gripped me tight i was trapped
and couldnt fight you were forcing me with all your might
the one i onced loved was out of sight
when you where done useing me for your fun
i was cast aside and left behind
you yelled out with all your anger
i didnt know you then you where a stranger
i thoght i was safe from all the world's danger
but from then on i was no human or animal nor even a creature
i was dead just as i am now gone and left with no feature
i gave you my trust you killed it with lust
i am forever gone and forever broken
you stole my soul and kept it as your token leaving an empty shell-
so are you happy now my life is hell?
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comment and such i hope you like it!! it's long but i think it's an o.k. poem.

LittleMomo
06-25-2006, 05:05 PM
It's kinda sad, but the poem is good, make sure when you end your poem, kinda have something like this: (Otherwise, it's a great poem)

Poem....
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write what you say below

wolf-on-the-hunt
06-25-2006, 05:28 PM
hey i fixed it does it look any better??

Toughfairy101
06-25-2006, 06:07 PM
I love it, it's deep, sad, and makes me want to cry. Good poem. ;)

Aleyna
06-25-2006, 10:25 PM
wolfy that was such a sad poem it brought me to tears

great poem, great poem

that was hard to read and for some reason i want to read it again and again and again :)

wolf-on-the-hunt
06-25-2006, 10:33 PM
hehe thnx guys ^.^ but is it really all that sad?? do really think it's good??

animeangellover
06-26-2006, 05:21 PM
it makes me want to cry a little i thought it was very deep

Cat_Demon
06-26-2006, 05:27 PM
Nice job my girlie, I like your style of writing. Sort of sad but still good.

Dr.McDoom!
06-30-2006, 01:53 PM
That's so sad, wolf.
I'd give you more reps, but i'm all out.