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cherryblosmes
06-23-2006, 05:16 PM
hi im back again and i dont know if this poem is good or not i hope u guys like it and that it makes to sense to yall. well enjoy

Born with Pride and Light

The light was shining
I saw it coming
I was there standing
it was marvelously touching
The atmosphere surrounding
The earth as if like it had a wing
It was something
That was worth of seeing
Even if it meant dying
It was marvelously toughing
The atmosphere surrounding
The earth as if like it had a wing
This is the best day of all living
To the earth crust shining
It was digging
It was deepening
For something it was looking
It was disappearing
From earth’s crust it was shooting
It again was appearing
It was marvelously touching
The atmosphere surrounding
The earth as if like it had wings
On the top it was carrying
Something that was delighting
It self was watching
So it wouldn’t be falling
It was marvelously touching
The atmosphere surrounding
The earth as if like it had a wing
It also was shining
With its beautifulness pounding
It was tall and sprouting

well i hope yall enjoyed it and that u yall leave comments telling me ur openiuons ( wah >.< cant ever spell) thnx for yall's time.

Vendetta
06-23-2006, 05:26 PM
Honestly I didn't understand what it was about. I mean the title kind of threw me off. But, I liked the way you used words I guess.

cherryblosmes
06-23-2006, 05:41 PM
i know it doesnt make sense that much i kinda left to my imagination to like a tree growing or something. but considring that i was dying of bordem when i wrote this its good lol. thnx though for the comment. ^.^

♥Sakura♥
06-23-2006, 06:12 PM
I may not understand this poem but I do honestly like it.



:groupwave



*Doggy wanna run cause he :dogrun:wanna hear more of your poems.*

inuyasha_lover7089
06-23-2006, 06:22 PM
i dont really understand it either but it sounds great and wonderful i really like if you make more i will read them they are very good

Kitanoru
06-23-2006, 06:57 PM
It was hard to understand at first but I think I got the message, very cool, and interesting, i'm not sure but it seemed like there were a few typos, however none the less, I really did enjoy reading this poem. Keep up the good work! I look forward to reading more of your poetry, and anaconda, cool poem! you too keep up the good work you both make good poets^^

cherryblosmes
06-23-2006, 08:15 PM
thnx guys that helped me lots ^.^

Aleyna
06-24-2006, 10:07 PM
i really liked it alot!!!!!

i thought it was a tree!!!

i could read that poem again and again, it was so interesting,it made you wonder wut it was n then u told us at the very end thats a good technique :)

Daenerys
06-25-2006, 02:02 AM
I liked it, I thought it was a tree? What the hell?

animeangellover
06-26-2006, 07:44 PM
i didnt quite get it at first^^; but i did enjoy it it was very nice!^_^