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TodayIsMine
05-30-2006, 11:40 AM
Pipelines running through your brain

Tormenting your eardrums when

You try to think.


People say, "I've gotta see it to believe it!"

And for that you're all so dumb.

Try to think outside the box and

Maybe then your tears will dry up.


He's right there, but nobody listens.

Why?

Because it's the 'cool' thing to

Be an atheist today?


"I've gotta see it to believe it!"

Gets you nowhere.

We're all right here, He's all right there.

Nature.

Sound-proof.

Cripple.


Snowfall on a cold winter night

That makes Christmas worth looking forward too...


He's all right here.

And yet, to see is to believe;

To believe is unacceptable;

To be who you truly want is not who you truly want to be.


Relic.

Half-smile.

Autumn.


That feeling you get in your stomach

That makes you want to turn back but it's too late...


He's right there.

Give your brain to the music.

Pipelines torment.

Ear wax disabling thought to exit your brain.

Don't combust.

Just believe.

Wonderwice
05-30-2006, 11:54 AM
my music spontaniously stopped playing when I read the poem x)
Another great poem Flamy...I love your work ^^
You're using your words on a special way..yet so clear ^^
Way to go Flamio! <3

Outsider
05-30-2006, 12:53 PM
A very interesting poem. I had no spiritual intervention during the reading aside from a strong wind outside but this is trult beautiful. Nice work me thinks.

Aleyna
05-30-2006, 02:50 PM
i like your idea of pipelines that was creative i gotta give u props u r a good poet

Aminity
05-30-2006, 02:52 PM
Now this is a bit more unique one.. hee-hee. *thumbs up* ;)

Daimasukí
05-30-2006, 03:01 PM
I haven't read any poems like this one, so I say to you great crativity, and imagination!

Dr.McDoom!
05-30-2006, 03:18 PM
Hmmmm... You're trying to say our mentality is wrong?
PS: When i get the pain in my stomach, i never think of going back. I know better.
Good poem, though, too bad it is inclined in my antagonism.

~Shadow~Wolf~
05-30-2006, 08:48 PM
:claps:Nice!I love it!I would love to see more of it^_^

TodayIsMine
05-30-2006, 09:27 PM
Thanks everyone! You're all so kind.