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LittleMomo
05-09-2006, 07:57 PM
My poems are slipping,
somehow I got to make it good,
good like it was a brand new car,
it has to flow better,
like a river flowing steadily,
I need more time in my poems,
if I don't, it doesn't do any good,
It needs to be perfect everytime,
like it was first place in a game,
my poems are slowly going downhill,
as if a bike is going down from a steep hill,
Will I ever make a good poem?
or will I get the same comments over and over,
who knows until I make another one,
I'll improve so don't worry,
I just need more time, that's all.
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Done, and enjoy ^ -^

yami hatake
05-09-2006, 08:35 PM
You make great poems!!..don't ever doubt yourself..great poem!!Hope to see more soon:)~yami

_CTA_
05-09-2006, 08:50 PM
wohooo!! daisuke made a new poem again!! as usual its nice!! i like it!!