what's in my heart

[LittleMomo]

How can I live without you,
when you fill me with such happiness,
you gave me light, love and care,
for that thank you,
I was too late to get to you,
but I promise,
that I'll meet you one day,
and maybe talk more often,
I just know,
one day we'll meet,
thank for everything,
you make my heart blush,
thank you, but words,
can't really mean anything,
so I'll give you my love too.
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This is for my someone who was sad today. ^-^ I hope you're better _Sakura_!

[Demonic Ice Dragon]

Aww, that was really cute, Jump.
Keep up the good work.
I really need you on my sad days o.o;; Lol

-Demonic Ice Dragon

[bafflequeen]

that's a really sweet poem
nice job!

[suky]

*more clappies!!!* It's just amazing!, beyond words!, I give it 9 out of 10 it almost rhymed, but it kinda went down in that section, but it did have a lot of insperation!

P.S. this is constructive critisim not meany foe finny critisim!!

[LittleMomo]

Thanks suky, I try to make my poems great for my readers! ^-^

[suky]

Your very much welcomed!!!:D

[Music Fiend]

A good poem, but I have some problems with it:

"for that thank you" ~ line 4 ~ You should have a comma, "...", or "I", in between -that- and -thank-

"thank for everything" ~ line 11 ~ You need "you" in there

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Again, I liked it, but there were a few trip-ups.