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Vampireness
09-03-2005, 02:16 PM
The girl no one cared for

She screamed but no one heard

She begged but no one helped

she sang but no one listend

she asked but no one answered

she needed but no one gave

she lived but no one cared

she died but no one knew
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hope ya'll like it ^-^

blondy
09-03-2005, 10:13 PM
sad. but i liked it.

Vampireness
09-04-2005, 11:37 AM
Thanks <3, i usually always write sad ones

Masali
09-04-2005, 11:18 PM
I wouldn't care for someone as pathetic as her either.

sumae_the_firewolf
09-05-2005, 12:07 AM
I liked it.. very nice.

Vampireness
09-05-2005, 02:18 PM
Ya'll make meh happy <3

Marie2007
09-05-2005, 02:21 PM
i really like it because i experience it everyday

bms
09-05-2005, 02:35 PM
Not bad, not bad at all.

sesshy girl
09-05-2005, 03:14 PM
that was a great poem. i enjoyed reading it a lot. it was a little sad and thats what made it a good poem to read ( well to me anyway )

Kikeen
09-05-2005, 03:46 PM
I liked it. I really did.

Spirit of Darkness
09-05-2005, 04:30 PM
The poem sounded kind of weird, but nice thought about the poem. I say that it's good enough, just that it's too short.
But nice poem.:)

Wandering Samurai
09-05-2005, 04:37 PM
I liked it. it's a great poem.

Vampireness
09-07-2005, 05:13 PM
^-^ yaynesss, <3 thank you

shi_amai
09-07-2005, 06:15 PM
It was good, I liked it... sort of reminds me of the stuff I write.

~DizzyElf~
09-07-2005, 06:39 PM
very nice- at first glance I thought great one of those repeating peoms.....but it was really good as said don't judge books by it's cover- I liked it very much even though it was sad- I wish you found some more lines to add- but w/e works ^^

Saphire
09-07-2005, 07:12 PM
darn....
it describes me!!
*cries*
i dont even care for myself anymore!!!

Nocturne
09-07-2005, 10:33 PM
Wow, that's a lovely poem :) Can't wait to see more of your work ^^

ThaiCat91
09-09-2005, 03:27 PM
sad, but I'm sad. U are really good, keep on the good work

.Lovebeat
09-09-2005, 04:22 PM
Really sad *tear* keep up the good work! I love this one ^^

chii-fan-lover
09-09-2005, 04:38 PM
i loved ur poem.its sad but nice

kenny_killer
12-15-2005, 07:20 PM
why cant you stop flamming and respect other peoples stupidity?





n'y ways... plain and simple poem.. good, um... use of words but no real story or... not enough...um...well its just kinda to simple...

King_of_bandits_Jing
12-15-2005, 07:22 PM
0.0 its so good u should be a poem writer for life u can make alot of money for it

Daenerys
12-15-2005, 11:20 PM
I wouldn't care for someone as pathetic as her either.As mean as that was, it made me laugh. And probally the same thoughts I had when I read it.

It was a nice idea, but too continual.

Scarlet Wolf
07-21-2006, 11:44 AM
Nice Poem It Reminds Me of a Movie i Saw a long time ago

halcyon23
07-21-2006, 12:20 PM
good job i hope to see another from you

hoshiXkoneko
07-28-2006, 06:54 AM
omg, i think i'm going to cry!! that was like really, really good! better than any of mine. we will be seeing more of your superb work, right?

~Pure Soul~
07-28-2006, 09:53 AM
Wow thats sad..so so sad..but good it made me cry.and I dont know why.^^
GOOD JOB!!keep it up.