View Full Version : Dawn To Dust

07-05-2005, 03:03 AM
Vancant lots,
Hollow alleyways.
Something doesn't seem right,
Might be the smell of decay.
Sun's starting to shine,
People awake to the day.

Naokomi ShYana
07-05-2005, 03:09 AM
Hmm that was hot. Simple but good. Atleast you didn't make 3458976 spelling errors. ;D

07-05-2005, 07:59 PM
I try not to spell things incorrectly.

Thank you.

07-05-2005, 08:25 PM
I don't really understand what the message is.:\

07-05-2005, 09:37 PM
Not all poems are supposed to have a message.

In some cases some have multiple message, as is the case with this poem.

What do you think one of them could be?

evil killer
07-05-2005, 11:28 PM
its good, i dont see many people write poems on here.

07-06-2005, 12:20 AM
O_o that's all I'm able to find on this site lol

The Wing Man
07-06-2005, 03:09 AM
It was good but it was very short.

07-06-2005, 03:38 AM
I've seen shorter.

07-06-2005, 12:48 PM
Short and shweet =D (no errors... so it didnt' make very much of a difference this time =D) Pretty good ^^;

07-06-2005, 01:07 PM
What were my errors? I'd like to know.

07-06-2005, 01:26 PM
great poem Ai keep it up

07-08-2005, 01:59 AM
Thank you, your encouragement is always welcomed! <3

07-08-2005, 10:47 PM
Sounds good; short and sweet. Plus, as Naokomi mentioned before, you didn't make *insert seven digit number here* typos.

Keep the great work up!