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Sweet Lucidity
06-27-2005, 04:25 PM
14 crism moons earth the grass laid sounder upon
red shadows spill from the eyes of the heart that which pools in tarnish grains of time
starving pores request the strands of air
these eyes catch not the yellows nor the oranges of being but paint the silver in the bullet

where the green plates collide the elemental soul of rain rises breath no more to hear the speckled darkness imprisen the 14 free floating's incandesitity

so what do you think? please reply

Ωmega
06-27-2005, 04:29 PM
your an obserdist like me =) i liked it

Sweet Lucidity
06-27-2005, 04:30 PM
so that is good, right?

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:06 PM
lol, i like poems that make me think =D *cheers Sweet Lucidity on ^_~*

Sweet Lucidity
06-29-2005, 12:08 PM
lol, i like poems that make me think =D *cheers Sweet Lucidity on ^_~*
thks for replying Nerveya!:D

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:10 PM
Haha, i did because you deserved it ^_~

Sweet Lucidity
06-29-2005, 12:15 PM
it has been up for a couple days now and hardly any one replyed so i thought they hated it it made me sad:broken:

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:20 PM
;; How mean, sorry i didn't reply sooner then lol. I don't know why anyone would hate it though, it's really good =D Wish i was a good poet, for now i can only admire ^^

Sweet Lucidity
06-29-2005, 12:30 PM
;; How mean, sorry i didn't reply sooner then lol. I don't know why anyone would hate it though, it's really good =D Wish i was a good poet, for now i can only admire ^^all my poems come to me in my sleep maybe you will wake up one day and have lots of good poems ^_^

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:32 PM
Oooh, i hope so ^^ I hope they're as good as yours ^_~ All i get from dreams are wierd visions of the future lol

Sweet Lucidity
06-29-2005, 12:35 PM
i wish i had weird visions of the future ^_^

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:41 PM
Lol, you wouldn't know how many people say that ^_~

Sweet Lucidity
06-29-2005, 12:49 PM
Lol, you wouldn't know how many people say that ^_~
:eek: Amaze me.

Nerveya
06-29-2005, 12:55 PM
Lol, considering you asked... i told a friend in high school, he told the whole 10th and 11th grade class x.x Everyone who saw me came up to me lol. That and i posted on moghouse forums about it~ it got to over a thousand posts lol. It got locked because of server backflow though~

*cough* but isn't this a little off-topic lol~

LittleAngel
07-10-2005, 01:39 PM
The poem sounds pretty good and sophisticated, but you use quite alot of big words *@[email protected]* I don't get what it's about.