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Daenerys
06-02-2005, 03:21 AM
There was once this little girl who was fat and ugly and no one liked her, so her mom beat her with the ugly stick, and people thought she was mentally ill so they all loved her for they thought she were daft n' dumb, but she wasn't, and people took pity on her, and she played along, and then one day she got hit by a car and actually became daft n dumb and everyone found out that she was just playing along for attention and everyone got mad at her and no one visited her in her hospital room and no one took pity on her, and no one loved her, and then she died cold and alone.

The end.





It's one of those idea's that wouldn't turn into a good story. Short story it shall stay.

Prince Seven
06-02-2005, 04:00 AM
wow that's a colorfull story

Daenerys
06-02-2005, 04:03 AM
What do you mean by colorful? Can you be a little more descriptive in your reply?

Missy
06-02-2005, 04:03 AM
Heh, very interesting. Succint and straight to the point :P

Prince Seven
06-02-2005, 04:26 AM
i mean i think its very sad and a little desturbing did you come up with it yourself?

Faroelove
06-02-2005, 11:04 AM
It's like the boy who cried wolf.

Dark-Angel
06-02-2005, 11:16 AM
who thats a verry sad umm story???

Daenerys
06-05-2005, 07:27 PM
I pretty much pulled the idea out of my rear, yeah. Someone asked me to write them a story, and I did, although it wasn't the kind of story they wanted XD

~DizzyElf~
06-05-2005, 08:11 PM
Intresting...so wat happened to her mother XP

Daenerys
06-05-2005, 08:54 PM
She got arrested for child abuse.

~DizzyElf~
06-05-2005, 09:25 PM
Well thank you for telling me this information- but wat about the other ppl who liked her?

Daenerys
06-05-2005, 09:41 PM
IT'S JUST A GOD DAMN STORY! If you were meant to know every aspect of the story that happens after the story was told, I would have written another part.

God, that's annoying. Just take it as it is. Don't ruin it by asking questions that have nothing to do with the moral of the story.

~DizzyElf~
06-05-2005, 10:56 PM
Oh well I know- just a little curios..*spelling wrong* but it was a intresting story

Benitora_shadowman
06-05-2005, 11:06 PM
good story and stright to the point, can you make another one?

naiume
06-09-2005, 01:19 PM
i agree straight to the point but y would you write that for some one? its to depressing...

Daenerys
06-12-2005, 12:25 AM
I unno, they were being annoying..

And sorry for getting mad. I was just aggervated.

What do you want the moral lesson to be of the next story?

~DizzyElf~
06-12-2005, 12:32 AM
You Are What You Eat!- lol- or...You're Neighbor Is Always Evil- I'm a joker.

Slayerfan
06-12-2005, 12:37 AM
Wow, that was....quite an interesting story

Daenerys
06-12-2005, 12:45 AM
...The only idea's I can get for "You are what you eat" are very perverted and dirty things ><

Slayerfan
06-12-2005, 12:52 AM
Then you have a dirty mind. But i for one have a great idea for "You are what you eat". It can be about a fat kid who do nothing but eat and on day he wakes up and finds that he is a gigantic glob of food and what not, he goes to africa for a school trip and dies a horrible death getting eating by the hungry Ethiopians.

Daenerys
06-12-2005, 01:02 AM
I don't think that one's appropriate at all.

Slayerfan
06-12-2005, 01:20 AM
ok, i'm sorry for that one

Naokomi ShYana
06-12-2005, 05:07 AM
Safe Sex. <3

Bucky Katt
06-12-2005, 07:28 AM
A very good story, Ai! How about, "There once was a girl that was really daft and dumb; she didn't like being ignored so she listened to your story and had the idea to get hit by a car, thinking she could be normal after the car hit her. The car hit her and she became un-daft n' dumb but she died at the same time."


Morals: Never listen to stories made by Ai when the person gets hit by a car, lives, and then dies in a hospital; Never read that story when you are daft n' dumb or else you'll get stupid ideas like the girl my version of this short story.

"AND THEY LIVED HAPPILY-COUGH COUGH- EVER AFTER, THE END!"

~DizzyElf~
06-12-2005, 11:52 AM
There are voices in your head that tell you evil stuff...so listen to them?- that's an idea for one...or...hmmm I'll think of another one soon ^^

niKopol
06-12-2005, 01:17 PM
Ai that story has really peaked my interest...dark and twisted just the way mom used to make em.

ideas? ideas? hmm? aha just base one about me....trust me it'll go far.

Ami~chan
06-13-2005, 12:28 AM
I liked it; it reminds me of a story that Tim Burton could make into a great film. While it lacks descriptive words, it reminds me of the stories me mum used to tell me. Keep up the greatness.

Daenerys
06-15-2005, 03:18 PM
A very good story, Ai! How about, "There once was a girl that was really daft and dumb; she didn't like being ignored so she listened to your story and had the idea to get hit by a car, thinking she could be normal after the car hit her. The car hit her and she became un-daft n' dumb but she died at the same time."


Morals: Never listen to stories made by Ai when the person gets hit by a car, lives, and then dies in a hospital; Never read that story when you are daft n' dumb or else you'll get stupid ideas like the girl my version of this short story.

"AND THEY LIVED HAPPILY-COUGH COUGH- EVER AFTER, THE END!"I like this idea alot.

Along with the safe sex idea.

Bucky Katt
06-18-2005, 08:43 AM
Thank you, Ai! I'm glad you like the idea. Make another story like your first one! Lol.

BrittyBott
06-18-2005, 07:50 PM
I liked it. Cheers, for making my day.

Uchiha Ulquiorra
06-18-2005, 08:54 PM
good story i guess

Daenerys
03-01-2006, 07:07 AM
Thanks to everyone who left comments and thoughtful advice.

kakashiskitty
03-01-2006, 09:30 PM
i liked it alot good yet depressing awesome combo if ya ask me!