AceNoctali
03-19-2012, 03:20 PM
Hi everyone.
I've completed the translation of the Ending Song of the Playstation 1 game Sampaguita (3rd game of the Yarudora series), "Hold on", by Marlene Pena Lim.
It's a frikkin' awesome song, fitting for that great game, and I had tons of fun translating it. But there's a single line I'm not exactly sure if I translated it correctly. Can someone please look at it, see if I got it right, and if not, propose me an alternate translation of it? (And if you eventually see something that could be improved somewhere else in the lyrics while we're at it, don't hesitate pointing it out, I'm open to all suggestions). Thanks in advance!
Giving you the lyrics in Kanji, and my English translation of it. The line bugging me is bolded and orange-coloured.
Japanese lyrics, Kanji:
夜が終わらなければ いいと思った
二度と目覚めなくても いいと思った
あなたの胸に 抱かれた時の
鼓動が 心 溶かす
Hold on もう迷わずに
Your love 進んでゆける
あなたと出会えた 場所から始める
Hold on 会いたい気持ち
Your love 痛みに変わる
約束した日のあなたの声を
耳に残して
いつも過ちばかり 繰り返していた
私 導いたのは あなたの強さ
子供の頃に 感じたような
柔らかな手で つつむ
Hold on 幸せなんて
Your love 知らなくていい
凍えた思いは過去に消えていた
Hold on 二人で生きた
Your love 時を抱きしめ
もう一度あなたに会えるときまで
振り返らない
Hold on もう迷わずに
Your love 進んでゆける
あなたと出会えた 場所から始める
Hold on 会いたい気持ち
Your love 痛みに変わる
約束した日のあなたの声を
耳に残して
My English translation:
I once thought it didn't matter if the night wouldn't end
I once thought it didn't matter if I would never wake up again.
But the instant you held me into your chest,
Your heartbeat thawed my heart.
HOLD ON! I won't waver anymore
YOUR LOVE! I will walk forward,
Starting from the place we first met.
HOLD ON! This desire of meeting you again
YOUR LOVE! Changes into pain,
Leaving in my ears
Your voice from that day we promised ourselves to each other.
Ever since, I did nothing but repeat my mistakes.
What guided me throught the right way, was your strength.
When you're embracing me with those tender hands of yours,
It feels like I'm in my childhood days.
HOLD ON! It's fine if
YOUR LOVE! I don't experience happiness
My cold feelings vanished with the past
HOLD ON! Cherising the times
YOUR LOVE! We were living together,
I won't turn back
Till the day I'll meet you once again.
HOLD ON! I won't waver anymore
YOUR LOVE! I will walk forward,
Starting from the place we first met.
HOLD ON! This desire of meeting you again
YOUR LOVE! Changes into pain,
Leaving in my ears
Your voice from that day we promised ourselves to each other.
I've completed the translation of the Ending Song of the Playstation 1 game Sampaguita (3rd game of the Yarudora series), "Hold on", by Marlene Pena Lim.
It's a frikkin' awesome song, fitting for that great game, and I had tons of fun translating it. But there's a single line I'm not exactly sure if I translated it correctly. Can someone please look at it, see if I got it right, and if not, propose me an alternate translation of it? (And if you eventually see something that could be improved somewhere else in the lyrics while we're at it, don't hesitate pointing it out, I'm open to all suggestions). Thanks in advance!
Giving you the lyrics in Kanji, and my English translation of it. The line bugging me is bolded and orange-coloured.
Japanese lyrics, Kanji:
夜が終わらなければ いいと思った
二度と目覚めなくても いいと思った
あなたの胸に 抱かれた時の
鼓動が 心 溶かす
Hold on もう迷わずに
Your love 進んでゆける
あなたと出会えた 場所から始める
Hold on 会いたい気持ち
Your love 痛みに変わる
約束した日のあなたの声を
耳に残して
いつも過ちばかり 繰り返していた
私 導いたのは あなたの強さ
子供の頃に 感じたような
柔らかな手で つつむ
Hold on 幸せなんて
Your love 知らなくていい
凍えた思いは過去に消えていた
Hold on 二人で生きた
Your love 時を抱きしめ
もう一度あなたに会えるときまで
振り返らない
Hold on もう迷わずに
Your love 進んでゆける
あなたと出会えた 場所から始める
Hold on 会いたい気持ち
Your love 痛みに変わる
約束した日のあなたの声を
耳に残して
My English translation:
I once thought it didn't matter if the night wouldn't end
I once thought it didn't matter if I would never wake up again.
But the instant you held me into your chest,
Your heartbeat thawed my heart.
HOLD ON! I won't waver anymore
YOUR LOVE! I will walk forward,
Starting from the place we first met.
HOLD ON! This desire of meeting you again
YOUR LOVE! Changes into pain,
Leaving in my ears
Your voice from that day we promised ourselves to each other.
Ever since, I did nothing but repeat my mistakes.
What guided me throught the right way, was your strength.
When you're embracing me with those tender hands of yours,
It feels like I'm in my childhood days.
HOLD ON! It's fine if
YOUR LOVE! I don't experience happiness
My cold feelings vanished with the past
HOLD ON! Cherising the times
YOUR LOVE! We were living together,
I won't turn back
Till the day I'll meet you once again.
HOLD ON! I won't waver anymore
YOUR LOVE! I will walk forward,
Starting from the place we first met.
HOLD ON! This desire of meeting you again
YOUR LOVE! Changes into pain,
Leaving in my ears
Your voice from that day we promised ourselves to each other.