the emptiness inside

[polaris 北極星]

i wrote this poem a while back. this is a look into the dark side of my heart...


so much sadness trapped inside
running out of places to hide
constantly pretending its not there...
the emotional scars i reluctantly wear
so hungry, eating away at me
fearful: is this how it’ll always be?
how can i love...when i hate myself
spilling onto everyone else
depression transformed into anger
like an anchor; dragging me down
behind this smile is a frown
like a crown...i have to wear
i swear
life’s not fair
but i knew that already
taking me steadily
...down
the feeling i hate to embrace
has a face; my own
they say you reap what you sow
tell me something i dont know
continuing to grow
taking away... what i thought happiness was
all of this because
its the way its supposed to be
stripping away everything
leaving behing something broken and dead
leaving behind...a breathing shell
reality is my hell
im dead inside
just along for the ride
i can never hope to escape
my ultimate fate
searching for something i’ll never find
only EMPTINESS INSIDE
the final reveal
the nothingness i feel
because inside im dead
except for the voices...
inside my head

[Kaname Shikara]

This poem is very deep, so much emotion coursing through it. Great rhyming and great flow ^^ but as you said to me, you can display your feelings through your words very well too.

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i liked it. It's deep. Like lyrics to a rap song. Lyrics for Eminem. Mad props to you bro.

[Ellxeeva]

Aw, I can relate to this. My soul is leaving my body again polaris... O_O
A sad but beautiful poem. :')

[polaris 北極星]

thanks!!!

its an old poem, i think i posted it here once before... but most of you are newer so i can post again and it still be PC.

[SigmaSD]

You really do write great poetry, and like mentioned in one of your previous poems, it truly sounds like lyrics of a song. I was fascinated by the richness of imagery, especially the every end. You really captivated the essence of the title and truly taught us what it is like to be empty inside. What I like most is the fact that you instilled a sense of living through dead material; like a soul-less body that's struggling to survive.

But a breathing shell is still alive, and through mending the wounds can heal. Just wanted to bring some light out of the darkness, sorry.

I love this poem, fascinating job again polaris.

[Anime-Prince]

Impressive.

[polaris 北極星]

just so you all know, this is an old poem... it in no way reflects any current feelings i may have. my world is definately filled with love and light these days. but looking back on this poem has helped me to realize how the world can look totally different through emotional eyes. when you are in the dark, all you can see and feel is emptiness: you can feel its absolute seperation. but when you live in the light, you become one with the light. i feel ive come a long way since i wrote this. and im blessed to not be in the dark anymore! just thought id share that.....

[SigmaSD]

Thanks for the explanation, and I'm glad you managed to find that light at the end of the dark tunnel. *nod nod* Which means you're nothing like how you felt in the poem. Tbh though whenever I read poetry I don't relate it to the author cause sometimes they don't write about their feelings, so I try not to assume. Usually people give hints as to why they write it so that's who I know if the poem really relates to them or not.

[OminousCloud]

i wrote this poem a while back. this is a look into the dark side of my heart...

they say you reap what you sow
tell me something i dont know

Syllable wise, it sounds better to extend "tell me something I don't know" to "tell me something I do not know". The contraction gives it a rather unnatural abruptness.

[Kirei Shijin]

"the feeling i hate to embrace
has a face; my own
they say you reap what you sow"

^Wow, that part was exceptional!

The entire poem is great, though. This poem reminds me so much of how I used to be. It's such a hard thing to go through... hating yourself but given time it can and will change and you can find love/happiness.