You and I

[Kisarose]

Smiles seeped from your ear to mine.
Our simple, sweet lullaby.
I gazed upon aquamarine oceans
Brightly reflecting radiance.

A perfect vision of beauty.
Tightly ten met ten,
Warmth like summer.
But summer has its end.

Planets continue to orbit the sun.
The seasons change too
Eventually resulting in winter.

Crimson eyes now staring into memories
Burgundy blood now wrapped around your neck,
It was forecasted from the day I met you.

You said forever and everlasting.
The same promise the summer rose made to the bee.
Rose,
Was I not enough?

Reverberating over and over
Is your non-existent heart.
Wrapped and covered with my scarlet hatred.

Now the icicle of winter has withered you away
Never will be everlasting.
I ended that forever.
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So comments, criticism? I'm ready. >.<

[Anime-Prince]

That was.. fantastic. Your use of words created such vivid imagery. Your choice of phrasing created wonder and intrigues the reader to continue. This is a very good poem

[ELR]

I can just imagine each detail seperately, how they seem to have so many different things, but once they ran together, once it felt like a film of watching lovers disappear, heart filled warmth poem. I ask you to continue writing, my friend, for I have a feeling you will fill peoples hearts with emotions that will shine brightly to them.

[FanoBliv]

I actually had to process what I read. Bravo ;-)

[Lady_Baneheart_Of_Blades]

Whoo! Nice very nice. Rare that people use their writing like yours, sometimes in my writing I hide hidden messages. Last time I wrote a poem called 'Beaded Heart'. I find this one also about someone you love, only they end in a very ungrateful place. My messages are sometimes epic.

[kajikun16]

nice and amazing i like it alot

[Artcell]

Wow,now that was excellent!You are good,dudette!Keep it up!Would love to see more poems of yours =^.^=