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    Default The God of Pain

    Well...another from the "Dreams of an Insomniac" Series

    A bit demented, but it ends nicely.

    The God Of Pain


    If you do something bad for me,
    I’ll do something good for you.
    That’s how it works.
    The universe all evens out,
    And everything is just.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The greater the prize,
    The greater the pain.
    That is how I draw my power.
    The thing you ask is great indeed,
    And I’m afraid it’s going to hurt.
    The price I ask is all your pain,
    Until you feel nothing more.
    Pain that you yourself must cause.
    There will be blood, oh yes,
    And I will guide you along the way.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    Look around, you’ll see many things,
    With which to inflict pain.
    Once you have paid my price,
    Then I shall grant your desire.
    No-one else even listens to your plea.
    With that the man picked up the knife.
    ‘Then let us begin.’ He said.
    The demon smiled in return,
    And pointed a finger at the man,
    ‘Then let’s loosen up that skin.’

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The man braced himself for the impact,
    As he raised the blade above his head,
    Then swung and sliced his wrist.
    Veins were severed instantly,
    And the blood did flow.
    ‘I’m afraid you’ll have to try much harder,
    I scarce can sense a thing.’
    So the man swung again and again.
    His arms covered in gashes,
    Pieces of flesh dropping from his arms.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The blood flowed freely from him,
    And covered the dusty floor.
    Looking at the demon the man could see,
    He shook his head in disappointment.
    ‘More I think, much more than this.’
    He dropped the knife and picked up a hook,
    Which he drove into his thigh.
    In pain he cried out and dropped to his knees,
    Agony pulsing through his muscles.
    But the demon wanted more.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    He grabbed the saw and began to hack at his arm,
    He sliced his way clean to the bone.
    There was a grinding crack,
    As the bone splintered and shattered.
    But still the demon wanted more.
    In a frenzy of delirium the man throws the blade away,
    And grabs a hammer from the floor.
    ‘Yes, oh yes! You’re getting there,
    But what are you to do now?
    How will it end? Do you desire your prize enough?’

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The man turns the hammer in his hand,
    The hook from its rear staring at him.
    He gritted his teeth and swung the hammer at his face,
    The tool lodged into his eye cavity.
    Bone crunched as the hammer stuck fast.
    The man dropped to the floor.
    The figure gestured towards the gun.
    Shaking and bloodied fingers reach for the weapon.
    He held its barrel to his chest and pulled upon the trigger.
    The shot punched through him and showered his heart with holes.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The room echoed with the deafening explosion.
    The man lay dead, no more pain could be extracted.
    The floor was sodden with filth and plasma.
    The dark figure smiled and then slowly.
    As he had been summoned, disappeared.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.



    In a private room at St. Martins Hospital,
    A woman lay prostrate upon her bed.
    She had already cried her heart raw.
    Her hand still touching the incubation unit,
    That holds the body of her dead son.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    The nursing staff and doctors have left her with her grieving,
    Then slowly as if summoned,
    A shadow drifts across the room and stops beside the bed.
    ‘You are fortunate my young friend,
    To have a father that loves you so.’
    As the shadow touches the young baby,
    A monitor jumps into life.
    A heart beat is started and a life is begun again.
    The shadow then evaporates into the air
    ‘You were the one thing he desired and willingly paid my price.’

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.


    If you do something bad for me,
    I’ll do something good for you.
    That’s how it works.
    The universe all evens out,
    And everything is just.

    His power is immense,
    Pain is his fee.
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    I'm a psychic amnesiac. I know in advance what I'm going to forget.

    Children in backseats will cause accidents. Accidents in backseats can bear children.

    The more you learn, the more you know, the more you know, and the more you forget. The more you forget, the less you know. So why bother to learn?


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    Oh my god o.o this story is amazing. I took in every word so clearly and all I can say is you did a damn great job. o.o (excuse my language XD)

    Amazing set by
    Ezza Obsuna ^^

    The days fly by and the feelings remain
    So far away and causing us pain
    That's okay we'll make it through
    Soon we'll get to say "I love you"



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    Holy crap.

    "A shadow drifts across the room and stops beside the bed.
    ‘You are fortunate my young friend,
    To have a father that loves you so much.’
    As the shadow touches the young baby,
    A monitor jumps into life.
    A heart beat is started and a life is begun again.
    The shadow then evaporates into the air
    ‘You were the one thing he desired and willingly paid my price.’"


    . . . holy crap.
    I seriously felt the hair on my arms raise, and shivered while I read that.
    Tears reached my eyes before I could hold them back.
    Seriously.


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    It raised my hair too O.O;

    Amazing set by
    Ezza Obsuna ^^

    The days fly by and the feelings remain
    So far away and causing us pain
    That's okay we'll make it through
    Soon we'll get to say "I love you"



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    How many tabs do I have open right now?
    10.
    How many poems by Zandan? 8.
    xP


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    Glad you two like it. ^_^

    I have 8 poems posted? O_O

    Didn't know that...
    I'm a psychic amnesiac. I know in advance what I'm going to forget.

    Children in backseats will cause accidents. Accidents in backseats can bear children.

    The more you learn, the more you know, the more you know, and the more you forget. The more you forget, the less you know. So why bother to learn?


    Made by Hakuchuumu

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    More than 8, actually.


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    Wow. That was an excellent poem. Very graphic and dark but still good! The imagery was simply amazing. Also, your stanzas flowed beautifully especially because of the repetition of those two lines throughout. you have a great sense of form in your poetry which made it even more enjoyable to read.


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    This is one of my favorites....probably not the best, but a favorite.
    I'm a psychic amnesiac. I know in advance what I'm going to forget.

    Children in backseats will cause accidents. Accidents in backseats can bear children.

    The more you learn, the more you know, the more you know, and the more you forget. The more you forget, the less you know. So why bother to learn?


    Made by Hakuchuumu

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