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    Default My book

    Im not good at peotry but i think that is is worth a try.
    My book
    You left an impression in the blank pages of my life
    Even though i have ripped those pages out years ago
    the sparp pen that you used to to write on my pages has left an indentation. I can still feel the uneven texture of my once perfect pages
    In my book i have wrutten about manifestering hatred and precious love.
    I am an unfinished book with an eternity worth of pages left to write.

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    You did alright, good meaning behind it.

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    Ezza Obsuna ^^

    The days fly by and the feelings remain
    So far away and causing us pain
    That's okay we'll make it through
    Soon we'll get to say "I love you"



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    hmm . . . it's a good starting poem.
    Though you said "the sparp pen." I'm guessing that's supposed to be sharp.

    Anyway, the meaning is nice and clear like Kirako said, but I find the wording to be not as interesting because you used the words write and pages so much. It really sticks out since the poem is so short.

    Keep writing, though!
    I wanna see more. ^.^


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