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    Default My poem

    I don't really have a title for this poem but here it is.



    I'm alone in this darkness,
    I'm lost in this pain,
    I'm Empty in this body
    I gave you everything
    My heart, Body, Soul
    But yet it wasn't enough
    What more I can do for you to love me?
    What more Can I say for you to want me?
    I'm broken
    And Your love is no more.....





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    wow. pretty powerful. the narrator in the poem sounds very sad and depressed. it's good, but you should follow up the poem with something on a lighter note. maybe the narrator finds another's love and moves on.

    great poem though

    "Thinking of you, where ever you are..."
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    I thought it was greatly written really sad though. I hope you're ok. ^^

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    The days fly by and the feelings remain
    So far away and causing us pain
    That's okay we'll make it through
    Soon we'll get to say "I love you"



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    Silverwing, I don't think every story has a happy ending even though we all wish for one.

    The poem felt like a whim of wanting some help, a call to tell others how you really felt. Saddened by the heart to read such a thing, there be tears of lonliness behind those eyes in which just ask others without words to be cared for. Keep writing, my friend, sad or happy, your writing is welcome here.
    I am no more a rose than I am its thorns.
    No more a gentle breeze than I am the hailing storm.
    I am no more hated than I am loved.
    And I am no more heartfilled than I am heartless.
    This is who I am.
    ~ELR

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    thank you for your lovely comment but im sorry to say that there is no happy ending to this poem or story just sadness and pain.



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    This poem is like "When you walk away, you don't hear me say 'please oh baby don't go'. Simple and clean is the way that you're making me feel tonight. It's hard to let it go."

    It's really simple and straightforward. But i enjoyed it. I dunno, it just moved me....its beautiful.

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    awww teary awesome poem really and sad too.

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    Pretty good for a quick read. I could not seem to find a stable pattern but oh like I said it is good for a good read.
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    .....Simply beautiful.......though sad...it touched my heart..
    Lovely set made by the awesome Arxia!
    Thanks so much girl!
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    Thank you all for your lovely comments. it mean a lot to me



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