Deeper

[Kaname Shikara]

A poem I've just wrote for my 1000th post here on AF. I hope everyone likes it. ^^

Deeper

All the things I'm fighting for, I see not the calamities but the war
Wondering about the next move to make, hoping everything is a piece of cake
The actions I take are already in pursuit, always coming out absolute
As I wonder my emotions late at night, I think back to that malicious sight

Here I am, standing alone, seeing everything as if made of stone
I trudge on not wanting to let go, only the closest ones would know
The thing inside me seems so real, but I know its the only deal
I gain what I was fighting for, wishing it was no longer more

The night drags on forever, as the last of your emotions sever
Leaving you with a weird feeling, that only yourself can do the healing
The day seems too fast, as you're falling deeper and deeper into your past
Feeling nothing from all of this, you slowly sink into the abyss

Deeper now, wondering when you can forget everything that happened in the plow
When just then you see a wonderful sight, someone standing there in light
Right beside you where you stand, he holds out an extended hand
You take it now and feeling lighter than before, mended now, nothing is tore

All you needed was someone's helping hand
to pick yourself up off the sand

[-P.N.-]

Woo, cool poem. Sound so fighty and dark, yet somewhat peaceful... and warm... and friendship ~ish...
Anyway, congrat on 1k post. This is also my goal ^.^
The post number.. not the poem... I can't ccreate beautiful poem like you.

[Kaname Shikara]

Thank you for your comment ^^ I'm happy you liked it.

[poshyterra]

what a beautiful poem for a 1000th post! let us celebrate with slushies at sonic during happy hour! slushies on me!

i loved the poem. good job

[The Rogue Devil]

nice poem, it calmed me down when I read it

[Kaname Shikara]

I'm glad you liked it

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Great poem. Consistent rhythm, nice flow, beautiful words and message. It's very deep if i say so myself. Nice one lad. ^^

[Battler Ushiromiya]

Nice. ^^
CONGRATS!!!!

[Kaname Shikara]

Thanks guys

[Kirei Shijin]

Amazing! Simply amazing! Those last few lines were the best; they blew me away. This is your best poem by far Kirako. Be very, very proud of it!

[Kaname Shikara]

Thank you Kirei ^^ I do really like this poem. ^^

[Rulloxp]

I also really like how you can compare simple words and make them meaningful. This Poem and "Into the Sands" were my absolute favorites. OH! And "Intertwined" , Their all very nicely written . I love them all (:

[Kaname Shikara]

Thank youuuu so very much