My HATE for YOU...

[NaitoTenshi]

Passion…
Something you know nothing about…
I thought you loved me…
I herd you say it…

Did you mean it?!
No!…
Because you squashed it…
Killed it, like it meant nothing.

My life was ending…
Hope was no more…
All I knew was hatered…
Nothing else but hatered!

I felt as if you were filth…
Scum… on the bottom of a bucket…
Wallowing in your stupidity…
Nothing more than a pin…
A rusty old pin in a hay stack…

And I didn’t want to find you…
I wanted to kill you…
Hurt you like you hurt me…
Left me there to die…with nothing but fear in my eyes…

[Kaname Shikara]

There are a couple spelling errors but it's a deep poem great work keep it up ^^

[NaitoTenshi]

Thanks
This is one of my more scary poems..its from a place of dark times!

[ultra_maniac]

nice one you can do much better keep it up

[NaitoTenshi]

Thanks Ultra Maniac..
And yea i think your right..i can do alot better! lol

[Kaname Shikara]

Still very good poem ^^ we all go through dark times in our life. We just have to smile and bare with it ^^

[*Tsuki*]

O.O Yeah, the emotions definitely shine through.
It was good, but I think that you should work on it some more. >.<
There were two lines that were only one word each. O_O

[NaitoTenshi]

O.O Yeah, the emotions definitely shine through.
It was good, but I think that you should work on it some more. >.<
There were two lines that were only one word each. O_O

When i use lines like that its to make sure that the emotion in that particular part in the poem is very much felt! lol its one of my writers tech. but thanks for thee feedback! My next poem will rock!

[*Tsuki*]

^_^
That makes sense.
w00t!
I'm sure it will. =D

[Anime Forum]

I guess it was okay. It had a decent flow, but could of been better. Some advice, maybe work on your flow some more.

Your poem had a nice idea and I enjoyed reading it, but you need a little more work until I can call you a good poet. More work and more poems submitted. I'm a bit harsh when it comes too poems, sorry but I believe that's one of the best ways to coach someone.

[NaitoTenshi]

^_^
That makes sense.
w00t!
I'm sure it will. =D

lol
well my next piece is up. Its called "A Lover Sodem Cry"

[Anime Forum]

Oh no problem! I'm very thankful for how great you answered my reply but ignored everyone else!

..thumbs up..

[NaitoTenshi]

TOTALLY OFF TOPIC: I dont know if you can see this "Miz" but when you place someone on your "ignore list" then it doesnt allow you to see what they posted!

Your on my ignore list becuase you gave me bad rep over something i dont think i deserved bad rep for, i dont wish to deal with you or the fact that you dont like, approve, or care for my post or my feelings; Umm im not asking you to read my threads nor am i asking for your "rep" so please just leave it alone.

I want to keep the peace, so to do that i can only do what i think is right.

[Anime Forum]

TOTALLY OFF TOPIC: I dont know if you can see this "Miz" but when you place someone on your "ignore list" then it doesnt allow you to see what they posted!

Your on my ignore list becuase you gave me bad rep over something i dont think i deserved bad rep for, i dont wish to deal with you or the fact that you dont like, approve, or care for my post or my feelings; Umm im not asking you to read my threads nor am i asking for your "rep" so please just leave it alone.

I want to keep the peace, so to do that i can only do what i think is right.

Wait what? I have five comments to say about that, and that's all.

1) Rep
So? who cares about rep power anyways? I have 5,999 rep currently typing this and I could truthfully care less if my rep went down too 0. If your going to care about rep then your going down the wrong road.

2) Post
How can you reply my other post if I'm on your ignore list.

3) Posts
Am I supposed to lie to avoid conflict with you? IF your talking about the poetry posts, then I have all right to speak my mind. I think that's what people post poetry on this forum. To recieve positive and negative feedback, if you don't understand that then you can't take criticism very well and you won't make it very far.

4) Oh and asking for rep? Who saids I ever thought you were asking for rep? I can't even rep you since I repped you recently. Trust me, I'll hold back my urge to good rep you but keep in mind that will hard for me to control.

5) I have all rights to read your threads, I'm not just reading your threads to cause negative conflict, so I hope your not thinking that. I hope you understand and in the future I hope you know your going to be good and bad repped in the future and its nearly impossible to avoid that kind of conflict. By the way, users disagree a lot on forums, that's what makes it a forum.

Back on track now! I hope you post some more poems soon so I can comment on more of em :3 can't wait too see.

[DarkMoonPrince]

I loved the poem, emotion and passion, i hope you post more.

[NaitoTenshi]

I loved the poem, emotion and passion, i hope you post more.

Thanks for the feedback! Next piece is up check it out!