Happy

[Jamie5192]

Happy

I want to take her life
I want to see her cry
Grab her by the throat
And squeeze until she dies
No.. I take that back
I want to hear her scream
And regret being alive
I want to make her wish
She'd never come into my life
I want to beat her to death
And remove her spinal cord through her neck
Can I have five minutes alone with her
Without a camara or sound
I promise when you come back into the room
She won't be around
I'll have had her beg for mercy
And in pain she'll be crying out
I'd have ripped out her heart
Crushing it beneath my feet
I'll watch as the light in her eyes fade
And her body slowly sways
But if you think I'm done you're sadly mistaken
Because it's then that I'd use my switchblade
I'd carve my name into her arm
And slice a hole into her throat
Then carefully i'd rip it apart
Shove my hand in and pull her spinal cord out
I'll laugh at the blood
And smile in satisfaction
But no that's not right
I'd never hurt someone like that
She's a human being
A person with a personaility
Someone who is like me...
So I'll just smile and wave
And pretnd to be Happy

[Anime Forum]

I spot a couple spelling mistakes, but that's fine. It was overall a decent poem with a few errors in flow. I don't think your ready yet to be called a great poet, but your starting too near that level.

Good Luck and also some good work Jammmmmmmmmmmmmmmmie = )

[XxPantherChickxX]

Morbid. Yush, I liek it. :3

[Kaname Shikara]

It creates imagery nicely in my head. I think we've all wanted to hurt someone like that but it's not in our nature to. I know I could never do it

[Ophidian]

Holy #*4&, sounds like some progressive rock lyrics to me.

That's a good thing.

Your mind has me curious...

[XxPantherChickxX]

Isn't it an amazing poem?

[Artcell]

Woah O_o
Awesome poem!It rocks!I like the ending because while I was reading your poem I thought that the ending would be like you finally got your happiness back by killing her..but that's not what happened,so I really liked the way you said "She's a human being
A person with a personality
Someone who is like me"
Keep writing Jamie!

[Kirei Shijin]

That was very honest. Not that many people can write like that and share it with others.

I thought it was very dramatic but the ending was perfect. It balanced out the whole poem.

This is one of your better poems but there's always room for improvement, with every poem, you'll only get better.

[Jamie5192]

Thank you everyone.. I think that this poem is one of my best.. maybe becuse I let my mind wander and wrote down where it went as it went there.. Either way.. Thank you for your comments and I'm glad you guys liked it! ^^

[Rein*]

Aren't we acidic n violent...it was an ok poem