Some help with a e-mail translation

[isaacsol]

I am helping my friend with a translation of a letter to Enterbrain, he has to e-mail them in Japanese. I have translated his message, but I want to make sure it is grammatically correct before sending it to him.

Here is the Original Message:

Hello Enterbrain,

I heard that there is a new "RPG Maker" being made. What are the features, and when is it scheduled to be released?

Thanks in advance.

Here is my translation:

こんにちはエンターブレイン、

新しいの「ＲＰＧツクルー」に産生は私が聞きました。フィーチャは何になりますか、そして、予定日は何をで すか？

前もってありがとうございます。

[Black Ace]

this is what i have translated. from the japanese you have put, I know it's not much, even though it still has a bit of japanese in it the translation.

'' I asked hello enter brain, new [RPG Tsukuru] the production. What the feature becomes and thank you for any をですか beforehand on a due date''

[Soulshift]

The e-mail you have there would probably be understandable but would come off as very unprofessional and slightly rude.

I took the liberty of re-writing it:

こんにちは、

突然なメールで失礼いたします。

私はNameと申します。Placeにすんでおります。新RPGツクールについて知りたくてメールしてみま した。もしよろしければ、今度のバージョンアップの新機能について知りたいんです。そして、もし発売日はも う決まっているならそれも聞かせていただければ幸いです。

よろしくおねがいいたします。

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